Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You let a friend stay at your apartment while you were away on a trip. When you returned home, you discovered that a valuable possession was broken.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• describe the broken possession.
• explain why it is important to you.
• explain what you would like your friend to do.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear _____,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to let you know about the broken windshield of my car. I am aware that it was a mistake commited you, though it was unintentional. Ergo I am not highly mad at you. However, I am not able to drive it now due to poor visibility causing by its broken windshield.

Since my car is MG Hector, it's windshield will cost me a fortune. Driving a car with intact windshield is very important as it reduces the chance of accident. As I have to go to office using my car, it needs to be fixed as soon as possible.

Since, your brother works in a service center of MG, I was assuming, you would talk with him so that I can get a discount on its price. I am even open for its first copy if it is available currently. I will look forward to get a positive responce from you.

Thanks

Ashja

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you identify the broken car windshield, explain that the car is needed for your commute and that repair is costly, and ask your friend to speak to their brother at the MG service centre about a discount. The apology-softening line, “I am not highly mad at you,” also helps establish a friendly tone. However, the importance of the car is explained more clearly than the personal importance of the possession itself, and the request is somewhat unclear: “I am even open for its first copy” does not make it certain what alternative you would accept. Develop these points more precisely and state exactly what action you expect from your friend.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter follows a sensible overall order: you introduce the damage, explain its practical impact, and then make a request. Paragraphing helps separate the situation from the proposed solution, and links such as “However” and “Since” show how ideas relate. Some connections are less smooth or clear, though. “Since, your brother works…” begins with an unnecessary comma and repeats the causal link, while “I was assuming, you would talk with him” interrupts the sentence with a comma and makes the request sound indirect. The final request would be easier to follow if it were stated directly, followed by a clear closing. Aim for more natural transitions and clearer links between the damage, its importance, and the action requested.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for the situation, including “broken windshield,” “poor visibility,” “discount,” and “service center.” These choices communicate the main facts, and “a fortune” adds an informal, friendly tone. There are also some inaccurate or unnatural choices that reduce precision: “intact windshield” is awkward in this context, “first copy” is unclear, and “I am not highly mad” is not a natural way to express your feelings. Spelling errors in “commited” and “responce” are noticeable, although the intended meanings remain understandable. Choose common, precise expressions for the repair and your feelings, and check spelling before submitting. This would make the letter sound more fluent and appropriately informal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, for example, “I am not able to drive it now due to poor visibility…” and “Since your brother works in a service center of MG, I was assuming…” The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors affect accuracy. In “a mistake commited you,” the sentence structure is incomplete; “causing by its broken windshield” has an incorrect participle construction; and “it's windshield” uses the wrong form of the possessive. There are also problems with commas after “Since” and before “you would talk.” Review clause structure, participles, possessive forms, and punctuation. More consistently accurate complex sentences would strengthen control while preserving the range you are attempting.

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