Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You let a friend stay at your apartment while you were away on a trip. When you returned home, you discovered that a valuable possession was broken.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• describe the broken possession.
• explain why it is important to you.
• explain what you would like your friend to do.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Ram ,

I am writting this letter to letting you know that when I was out on trip something important piece of antique item which I discovered broken from you .My grandmother gave me that and it was really valueable for me and she bought it from japan .You are my friend I donot want any fight between us .I have lot of memories with that item hopefullg you understand it .You can just do online order for me from the app if its possible or if you will help me to fix it up .In future whnever you get any chance you can just buy it from there .I am not blaming you ,it happens and I also donot want to ruin our relation as well .You did lot of care of my place which I saw from cleaniless .Hopefully you will get my point .

your's Sincerly ,

Raman.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three required points: you identify the possession as an antique item, explain that it came from your grandmother and carries many memories, and ask Ram to order a replacement or help repair it. Your reassuring tone—“I am not blaming you”—also suits a letter to a friend. However, some details are unclear or under-developed: it is not specified exactly what the item is, how it was broken, or whether you prefer repair or replacement. The request to buy it “in future” is also vague. Naming the object and making one clear, practical request, with a brief explanation of why that solution matters, would make the purpose more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The ideas are generally relevant and follow a sensible broad order: you introduce the problem, explain the item’s personal value, make a request, and reassure your friend. However, the letter is presented as one long paragraph, so the shifts between these points are difficult to follow. Several ideas are joined with full stops or “and” without clear links, as in “My grandmother gave me that and it was really valueable for me and she bought it from japan.” The repeated reassurance about avoiding a fight and not ruining the relationship also interrupts the progression. Use separate paragraphs for the damage and its importance, your request, and your closing, with clearer transitions between them.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main situation and relationship, including “antique item,” “memories,” “blaming,” and “fix it up.” The tone is mostly appropriate for a friend. However, spelling errors such as “writting,” “valueable,” “hopefullg,” and “cleaniless” are noticeable, and some expressions are imprecise or unnatural, including “something important piece of antique item” and “do online order for me.” Repetition of “just” and “you can” also limits variety. Choose more precise phrases for the object and the action you want, and check spelling carefully; this would make the message easier to read and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, and the reader can usually understand the main message. However, some sentence structures and verb forms are inaccurate, for example, “I am writting this letter to letting you know” and “something important piece … which I discovered broken from you.” The opening also lacks clear sentence boundaries, while “if you will help me to fix it up” does not express the request naturally. Articles and prepositions need attention in phrases such as “on trip” and “from Japan.” Aim for shorter, complete sentences first, then combine related ideas accurately. A careful check of verb patterns, articles, and punctuation would improve clarity.

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