Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs.
Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter
• describe the problem.
• say what you think should be done about it.
• ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem.You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear _________,
Student answer (Band 7.0)
Dear Sam,
I would like to inform you that my apartment's heating system is not working. It is challenging to live without heat in extremely cold weather. Since the heating system is not working, I am unable to get hot water. Now, I cannot take a shower or wash my dishes.
You sent a technician earlier to fix the problem but it seems like it is damaged again. It is almost a decade old apartment. I think due to old wires and equipments, the system gives us problems again and again. It is better to inspect it deeply and come with a conclusion. This not only saves our time but also saves money.
I am not an expert in this field but you previously used to work as a technician. You might find the exact issue. Kindly come and note the observations. If the problem is not fixed as soon as possible, I might get sick. I cannot afford sickness because of my working schedule.
Please tell me which day you will come then i can take a day off.
Thank you for your understanding.
Regards,
Kulwinder.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5
The letter clearly addresses all three requirements: you explain that the heating system has failed, describe the resulting lack of hot water, suggest a thorough inspection, and ask Sam to visit and identify the issue. The practical consequences—being unable to shower or wash dishes and the risk of becoming ill—make the problem clear and support your request for prompt action. Your proposed solution is relevant, although “inspect it deeply and come with a conclusion” could be more specific about what repair or replacement you expect if the system is beyond repair. The request for a visit is clear, and asking which day Sam can come helps make the next step practical. Overall, the purpose and position remain clear throughout.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0
The information follows a sensible progression: you introduce the fault and its effects, explain that an earlier repair did not last, propose an inspection, and then request a visit. Paragraphing separates the main stages of the letter, while links such as “Since,” “but,” and “If” help show relationships between ideas. The sequence is generally easy to follow, though some connections could be more precise. For example, the move from the apartment’s age to “old wires and equipments” is abrupt, and the sentence about Sam’s previous work as a technician could be linked more directly to your request that he inspect the system. A clearer transition and more precise referencing would make the progression smoother.
Lexical Resource: Band 6.0
You use an adequate range of vocabulary to explain the fault and its impact, including “heating system,” “technician,” “inspect,” “observations,” and “working schedule.” These choices make the situation understandable, and phrases such as “I cannot afford sickness” communicate urgency. Some wording is imprecise or unnatural, however: “inspect it deeply” and “come with a conclusion” do not express the proposed action idiomatically, while “old wires and equipments” contains an incorrect form and an awkward collocation. “It is almost a decade old apartment” is also unclear as a description of the building. More accurate repair-related collocations and precise descriptions would improve flexibility and naturalness.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5
The letter includes a useful mix of simple and complex forms, such as “Since the heating system is not working, I am unable to get hot water” and “If the problem is not fixed as soon as possible, I might get sick.” Most sentences communicate their meaning clearly. Some grammatical errors remain, including the missing subject in “This not only saves our time” (the intended subject is unclear), the article and word order in “It is almost a decade old apartment,” and the lowercase “i” in “then i can take a day off.” The sentence “I think due to old wires and equipments, the system gives us problems again and again” also has an awkward structure. Greater control of sentence construction, articles, and capitalization would make the writing more consistently accurate.
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