Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs.

Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter
• describe the problem.
• say what you think should be done about it.
• ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

i am writing to express my concern about apartment problem regarding washing machine which is not working proper from last month because of overload and less electricity. Moreover, it not only wastage my time but also money because i need to go outside for laundry as a consequence i can not concentrate on my work because it has become big obstacle for me to clean clothes. Furthermore, i want to either replace with new one or repairing it as soon as possible so i can used it. Secondly, if you will come at apartment for looking this problem, it would better for you because you can observe this problem briefly and find another solution for repairing it as a result, it can repair as soon as possible.

I hope you would definitely solve my problem and let me know when you will available for visiting apartment. I would appericiate for your further response.

Yours faithfully,

Gagandeep Kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three requested points: you identify the washing machine as the problem, suggest repair or replacement, and ask the manager to visit. The impact on you is also explained through the need to use an outside laundry service and the effect on your work, so the purpose of the letter is clear. The request for a visit is present, although it would be more effective to propose a specific time or ask the manager to arrange one. The cause of the fault—“overload and less electricity”—is mentioned but not explained, and the repair/replacement request could be more precise about what you expect the manager to arrange. Overall, the task is addressed clearly, with some details that could be developed further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter follows a sensible overall order: it introduces the problem, explains its effects, proposes action, and closes with a request for a response. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore,” and “Secondly” help signal relationships between ideas. However, several transitions feel mechanical or do not accurately show the relationship between points; for example, “Secondly” introduces the visit request without a clear first-and-second structure, and “as a result” is repeated in a way that makes the repair sequence difficult to follow. The main information is also presented in one long paragraph, which reduces clarity. Separate the problem and its effects from the requested actions, and use simpler, more precise links to improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the situation and its consequences, including “concern,” “obstacle,” “observe,” and “solution.” These choices show an attempt to go beyond very basic wording. However, several word combinations and forms are unnatural or inaccurate, such as “apartment problem,” “not working proper,” “wastage my time,” and “further response.” These phrases sometimes make the reader pause to interpret your meaning. Spelling also needs attention, particularly “appericiate.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations rather than adding formal-sounding words where a simpler phrase would be clearer. For example, describe the appliance as “not working properly” and say that you would appreciate a “prompt reply.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “because,” “if,” and “as a consequence.” This allows you to explain the problem and its effects, but control is inconsistent, and some sentences become difficult to follow. Examples include “it not only wastage my time” and “if you will come at apartment,” where the verb forms and sentence patterns are faulty. There are also errors with articles and agreement, as in “it can repair” and “it would better.” Several ideas are joined into long sentences without clear punctuation. Practise accurate present-tense descriptions and conditional requests, and divide connected ideas into shorter sentences so the reader can follow them easily.

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