Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs.

Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter
• describe the problem.
• say what you think should be done about it.
• ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mathews,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing in order to bring in your knowledge that there are plenty of faults in the apartment that needs a fix.

Apart from the other problems, the water tap leakage needs an attention. I tried to fix it by myself few days ago, but that was temporary. The bathroom shower is totaly damaged, the kitchen taps are leaking and only cold water is coming out of it.

I think the whole apartment taps are needed to be changed. Though a full renovation is required by this time, but this cannot be ignored anymore. My roommate is moving to another house because of this problem.

I want you to visit the apartment to look at the problem and book a plumber to fix this as soon as possible. I would wait for you this saturday.

I look forward to get rid of this soon.

Zorawar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three requested points: you describe leaking kitchen taps and a damaged shower, propose replacing the taps and arranging a plumber, and ask the manager to visit. The request is clear in “I want you to visit the apartment,” and the roommate’s decision to move adds a relevant indication of the problem’s impact. The response also maintains a polite, appropriate letter purpose. To make the ideas more fully developed, specify which repairs are most urgent and give a clearer account of the extent of the damage; “plenty of faults” is broad, while the later details focus mainly on taps and the shower. State the visit request and proposed repair plan with slightly more precise detail.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a recognisable progression from introducing the problem, to describing specific faults, suggesting repairs, and requesting a visit. Paragraph breaks help separate these stages, and phrases such as “Apart from the other problems” and “I think” signal shifts in focus. The sequence is generally easy to follow, but some links are awkward or unclear: “Apart from the other problems” refers to faults that have not yet been explained, and “Though … but” makes the relationship between the renovation and the need for action less smooth. The closing also moves abruptly from the visit request to “I look forward to get rid of this soon.” Use more direct transitions and connect the proposed repairs to the specific faults.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the repair issue, including “water tap leakage,” “temporary,” “damaged,” “renovation,” and “plumber.” However, several noticeable word-choice and collocation problems make the letter sound less natural, such as “bring in your knowledge,” “needs an attention,” and “the whole apartment taps.” “Plenty of faults” is also vague for a letter about specific repairs, and “get rid of this” is imprecise in the closing. These choices do not prevent the reader from understanding the main message, but they limit precision and naturalness. Aim for common, accurate repair-related phrases, such as “make you aware of,” “the taps need replacing,” and “resolve the issue.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, for example, “I tried to fix it by myself few days ago, but that was temporary” and “Though a full renovation is required by this time, but this cannot be ignored anymore.” The meaning is generally understandable, but errors occur in agreement, articles, verb patterns, and sentence construction. In “faults … that needs a fix,” the plural subject does not agree with “needs”; “I look forward to get rid” requires a gerund after “look forward to”; and the “Though … but” construction is faulty. There are also missing articles in “few days ago” and “needs an attention.” Practise checking agreement and article use, and simplify complex sentences when their structure becomes difficult to control.

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