Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs.

Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter
• describe the problem.
• say what you think should be done about it.
• ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr. Shukla,

This letter finds you well. I am the renter of RK Apartment, room number 204, writing this regarding the pipeline blockage issue in our apartment which needs urgent repair that causes numerous health problems due to water flow during this rainy season in the building.

As the pipes are filled with some garbage and overflowing near the stairs and people hurt themselves by falling down and getting bad smells from these pipes, I would suggest you change these filters of the pipes or use the new electric one so that condition of the building gets smoother and cleaner which makes cleanness and sanitation easier for people and they maintain their health better.

On the behalf of the RK Apartment community, I personally request you to kindly visit the building once then we will discuss and resolve the matter together with all support. I think you will give your concern about this will wait for your positive response.

Your sincerely,

Leo

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points: the problem is described, a solution is proposed, and a request for a visit is made. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. The description of the problem is slightly confusing, as it conflates a 'pipeline blockage' with 'filters' and 'electric' solutions, which makes the nature of the repair unclear. While the tone is appropriate for a formal letter, the ideas could be more clearly articulated to ensure the building manager understands the specific issue. The response meets the requirements of the task but lacks the depth of detail expected for a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. There is a clear opening and closing. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally awkward, such as 'This letter finds you well' (which is a slight misuse of the idiom) and 'then we will discuss'. The transition between the problem description and the proposed solution is a bit abrupt. While the overall progression is coherent, the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect ideas more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it lacks precision and variety. Phrases like 'bad smells' and 'people hurt themselves' are quite basic. There are also some issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'change these filters of the pipes' and 'give your concern about this'. The student attempts to use formal language, but the execution is inconsistent. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on using more precise terminology related to building maintenance and plumbing, as well as more natural collocations for formal correspondence.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The letter contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity, such as 'This letter finds you well' (should be 'I hope this letter finds you well') and 'the condition of the building gets smoother' (which is an odd choice of adjective). There are also issues with article usage and prepositional phrases, such as 'on the behalf of'. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. More attention to subject-verb agreement and standard formal phrasing is needed.

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