Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs.

Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter
• describe the problem.
• say what you think should be done about it.
• ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to report some repairs that needs to be done attended to. As you may be aware, I am one of the tenant that rented the down floor of your apartment. Since I moved into this house, I have an issue with my kitchen sink, the water does not flow properly and it leaks water into the cabinets. Additionally, there is no electricity since I started living in this housing unit despite the fact that my next door neighbor has light. Furthermore, the electrical bills keep coming even though I have not seen electric power.

The faucet in my kitchen should be changed, in addition, the service of an electrician is needed in order for them to connect the necessary wires so power could be restored in my home.

I implore you to pay a visit to my home to view the various damages in order for renovation to resume.

Thank you, I hope my request is duly noted.

Yours faithfully

Ajawara Chidimma

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points: describing the problem, suggesting a solution, and requesting a visit. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a building manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat basic. For instance, the request for a visit is a bit abrupt, and the description of the electrical issue could be more precise to ensure the manager understands the urgency. To improve, you should expand slightly on the impact of these issues to better justify your request for a prompt resolution, ensuring the letter feels more persuasive and professional.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized, with a clear introduction, body, and closing. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'Furthermore', and 'in addition' to link your ideas. However, the paragraphing is insufficient; the entire body of the letter is contained within two very short paragraphs. A more standard structure would involve separate paragraphs for the problem description and the proposed solutions/request for a visit. Additionally, some transitions feel slightly mechanical. Improving the flow between sentences and using more varied paragraph structures would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to communicate your message clearly. Phrases like 'duly noted' and 'implore you' are appropriate for a formal context. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'renovation to resume' (which implies work was already happening) and 'down floor' (which is not standard English; 'ground floor' would be better). You also use 'housing unit' and 'apartment' interchangeably, which is acceptable but could be more consistent. To reach a higher band, focus on more precise collocations and avoid slightly unnatural phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. For example, 'repairs that needs to be done attended to' contains a subject-verb agreement error and redundant phrasing. 'I am one of the tenant' should be 'one of the tenants', and 'there is no electricity' would be more naturally expressed as 'there has been no electricity'. While you attempt some complex sentence structures, they are often marred by these slips. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage, particularly when describing ongoing issues that started in the past.

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