Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs.

Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter
• describe the problem.
• say what you think should be done about it.
• ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Dear Noor,

I just wanted to write a quick letter to tell you that i recently changed my job. Because i always looking for an opportunity where i can take on greater experience and enhance my professional skills. By the grace of Allah Almighty i got that chance established my career. My previous job was a good layout, You better know about that it was a clinical based job and the hectic dealing of patients about how to counsel them properly.

Futhermore my new job, it is in UNICEF, a non governmental organisation that's work on children health and nutrition. My designation in this organisation is Data and reporting officer, the salary and the facilities they provided me are just mind blowing.

Moreover, on the other side of my daily routines, i recently enrolled my self in the English language course to elevate my english speaking and writing that will helps me in upcoming time both in my personal and professional career.

I look forward to catching up with you soon.

Best Regards,

Noor Fatima.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 2.0

The response completely fails to address the prompt instructions. The task requires writing a letter to a building manager about a problem in an apartment that needs repairs, describing the problem, suggesting a solution, and asking the manager to visit. However, the student wrote a letter to a friend discussing a new job at UNICEF and enrolling in an English course. Because the content is entirely off-topic and fails to fulfill any of the bullet points specified in the prompt, the task achievement cannot be evaluated positively against the prompt requirements, resulting in a low band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The letter opens with an appropriate greeting, but the paragraphing and organization are quite weak. The text moves from job changes to UNICEF details and then to an English language course without smooth transitions. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly, such as 'Futhermore my new job, it is in UNICEF' and 'Moreover, on the other side of my daily routines'. Paragraph breaks are somewhat arbitrary, and overall progression is disjointed, leading to a confusing structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range for basic communication, using phrases like 'professional skills', 'clinical based job', and 'non governmental organisation'. However, there are notable limitations and awkward collocations, such as 'a good layout' instead of a good environment, and spelling or punctuation issues like 'i' instead of 'I'. Attempts to use less common vocabulary are often inaccurate, such as 'mind blowing' for salary and benefits, which is overly informal for this context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but error frequency is high. There are numerous grammatical and punctuation errors throughout the text, including sentence fragments and run-on sentences, such as 'Because i always looking for an opportunity where i can take on greater experience' and 'established my career'. Other errors include subject-verb agreement issues like 'that's work on children health' instead of 'that works'. These persistent errors frequently cause strain and distraction for the reader.

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