Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs.

Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter
• describe the problem.
• say what you think should be done about it.
• ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mark,

I hope you are doing well.

I am writing to inform you about some issues that recently arise in my appartment.

Initially, I would like to explain about the light in the washroom. The light in shower area was blinking various times prior. However, today when I opened that light, I saw a spark in the holder of bulb and afterwards it is not working.

Aditionally, there is a problem in the window of our bedroom. I feel window is not closing properly, may there is a problem in alignment of window. Due to the fact, the heater does not working well and this issue impacts on our electricity bill. Moreover, if you change the window, this issue might be resolve.

In conclusion, I would appreciate if you could visit my appartment and resolve these factor as possible as you can.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Kind regards,

Kinza Latif

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response successfully covers all parts of the prompt, fulfilling the requirements for a general correspondence task. You clearly describe the two maintenance problems in your apartment, namely the electrical issue with the washroom light and the alignment issue with the bedroom window. Furthermore, you state what you think should be done about them by suggesting a window replacement and asking for the issues to be resolved, and you explicitly ask the manager to visit your apartment. The ideas are extended and supported well, such as explaining how the faulty window impacts your electricity bill. The tone is appropriate for a semi-formal letter to a building manager. To reach a higher level, the ideas could be developed with even greater precision and detail regarding the timing and urgency of the repairs.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter demonstrates a clear overall logical arrangement and progression. You begin with a standard polite opening, move systematically through the two separate maintenance issues in distinct paragraphs, and conclude with a courteous wrap-up and sign-off. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate each main topic. Cohesive devices are employed to link your ideas, such as "Initially", "Aditionally", and "Moreover". However, some of the linking phrases are a bit mechanical, and referencing is occasionally slightly repetitive or less fluid than expected at the highest bands. To improve further, you could use a wider variety of more sophisticated transitional expressions and ensure that referencing pronouns refer back smoothly without relying on repetitive sentence openings.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, successfully communicating your meaning to the reader. You attempt some less common vocabulary related to housing maintenance and appliances, such as "spark", "holder of bulb", "alignment", and "electricity bill". However, there are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, including "appartment" (spelled with a double p), "arise" instead of arose, and "Aditionally" with a missing 'd'. Additionally, expressions like "opened that light" and "these factor as possible as you can" show limitations in natural collocation and idiomatic phrasing. These errors do not completely impede communication, but they restrict your score. To achieve a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary with greater precision, better control of spelling, and more natural collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response shows a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating an attempt to use subordination and relative clauses. You successfully employ some error-free sentences, such as your opening and closing remarks. Nevertheless, there are several errors in grammar and verb tenses that persist throughout the letter. For instance, "issues that recently arise" should use the past tense arose, "the heater does not working well" contains an incorrect verb form, and "may there is a problem" has awkward word order. Punctuation is generally acceptable, and while these grammatical errors rarely impede overall communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. To improve your grammatical range and accuracy, focus on careful control of verb forms, auxiliary verbs, and sentence structures.

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