Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs.

Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter
• describe the problem.
• say what you think should be done about it.
• ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear manager,

I hope you are doing well. I write this letter to inform you about some of the issues that I have faced from many days in my appartment. As there are number of problems such as water leakage from the roof of my bedroom, so it is very inconvenient for me clean water from floor all the time. I am also concerning that water will damage the floor. Additionally, tap water not clean as there are some dust particals in water.

I just want that you send plumber to repair the broken pipe on the roof and some other person who clean the water tank so that we will get clean water for our personal use.

I hope for the positive reponse from your side, and we really want that you will come there see the horrible confition of our home. I know that you are a good person and will do some initiatives to solve this problems immediately.

Your faithfully

Sunny

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you describe the roof leak and dirty tap water, suggest repairs and tank cleaning, and ask the manager to visit. The practical details—water collecting on the bedroom floor and possible floor damage—make the problem clear. The request for a visit is present, but “come there see” does not clearly specify that the manager should inspect the apartment, and the proposed actions could be explained more fully, such as asking when repairs can be arranged. The letter’s purpose is clear throughout, and the relevant ideas are sufficient, though some are less fully developed than others. A more explicit, courteous request and a little more detail about the urgency would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter follows a sensible overall order: it introduces the problems, proposes solutions, and then asks the manager to act. Paragraphing helps distinguish the description from the requested repairs, while “Additionally” signals the second issue. However, some connections are awkward or mechanical, particularly “As there are number of problems … so” and the shift from the leak to the water-quality concern. The final paragraph combines the visit request, praise for the manager, and a general appeal for action, so the main request becomes less prominent. Use clearer transitions and separate the request for an inspection from the proposed repairs. This would make the progression more controlled while preserving the clear overall arrangement.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main concerns, including “water leakage,” “plumber,” “broken pipe,” and “water tank.” There are also attempts at more specific language, such as describing water damage to the floor. However, several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “appartment,” “particals,” “reponse,” and “confition.” Some phrases are also unnatural or unclear, including “clean water from floor” and “do some initiatives.” These do not prevent the reader from understanding the central message, but they make the letter less fluent and occasionally require interpretation. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling, especially in key requests and descriptions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, for example using “so that” to explain the purpose of cleaning the tank and “that” to introduce a concern. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur in basic sentence patterns as well. Examples include “I write this letter” instead of “I am writing this letter,” “there are number of problems,” and “tap water not clean.” The request “we really want that you will come there see” also has problems with clause structure and verb forms. These errors sometimes make the reader pause, although the intended meaning is generally recoverable. Practise complete clauses, articles, and consistent verb forms, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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