Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs.

Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter
• describe the problem.
• say what you think should be done about it.
• ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mark,

I am writing to bring your attention to an urgent concern which I am experiencing right now.

I moved into this apartment last month. One week ago, I realized that HVAC system is not working properly. It was raining and temperature went down. I was unable to manage temperature in my apartment. It became too cold in the night.

I checked maintanance log book for the system. Surprisingly, the scheduled maintanance was not completed since purchased it. It is big safety risk. As per the rental agreement, I am not liable for regular maintanance of any equipment in my apartment.

I am requesting you to arrange technician as early convinience. In mean time, I believe HVAC system could be shut down on temporary basis. I am available during the evenings. You can visit my apartment and have a look of it.

I am looking forward to sort out this issue as soon as possible,

Thank you for your attention!

Yours truly,

Manny

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three requirements: you explain that the HVAC system is not working, describe the cold conditions, request a technician, and invite Mark to inspect the apartment. The reference to the rental agreement also gives a clear reason for asking the manager to arrange maintenance. Your purpose remains clear throughout. To make the response more fully developed, explain the repair you expect in more precise terms—for example, ask for the system to be inspected and repaired, rather than suggesting it be shut down temporarily, which may not resolve the heating problem. You could also specify a preferred visit time or ask Mark to confirm when he can come. These additions would make the proposed action and request more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter follows a sensible progression: you introduce the concern, describe the system failure and its consequences, explain the maintenance issue, and then make requests. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and phrases such as “One week ago” and “In mean time” guide the reader through events and actions. The organisation is coherent overall, but some links are mechanical or unclear. For instance, “I checked maintenance log book for the system” leads to the maintenance history without explaining how you obtained it, and “In mean time” does not clearly connect the temporary shutdown suggestion to the technician request. Use more precise transitions and make the relationship between each proposed action explicit. The closing also shifts abruptly from a request to “Thank you for your attention!”

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for a maintenance request, including “urgent concern,” “scheduled maintenance,” “rental agreement,” and “technician.” These choices communicate the issue and your expectations clearly. There are, however, some spelling and word-choice or collocation problems that make the letter less natural, such as “maintanance,” “as early convinience,” and “on temporary basis.” “HVAC system” is suitably specific, though “equipment” and “system” are repeated. Aim for accurate, natural phrases and check spelling carefully; for example, say “as soon as convenient” or “at your earliest convenience.” More precise repair-related vocabulary would also help you state exactly what action you expect.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of short statements and more developed structures, including “As per the rental agreement, I am not liable…” and “I am looking forward to sort out this issue…”. Most of the message remains understandable, and the simple past in “I moved” and “I realized” helps establish the timeline. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with articles, verb forms, and sentence construction. For example, write “the HVAC system,” “since it was purchased,” and “I am looking forward to sorting out this issue.” The sentence “I am requesting you to arrange technician” also needs a clearer grammatical pattern, such as “I am asking you to arrange for a technician.” Review these patterns while retaining your useful mix of sentence forms.

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