Band 7.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs.

Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter
• describe the problem.
• say what you think should be done about it.
• ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 7.5)

Dear ------------------,

I am writing to discuss the recent issues I have been facing regarding the apartment I am renting in your building.

Firstly, I would like to highlight the poor condition of the electrical wiring that has led to several short circuits over the past month. The situation has gotten to a point where the majority of my appliances had their fuses burned off and now I have to replace them which is going to cost a lot of money. Moreover, the plumbing of the apartment is no exception to the issue as my bedroom has been flooded countless times by my leaking bathroom sink.

I can assure you that the unsafe electrical wring combined with the constantly flooded rooms have turned my apartment into a potential safety hazard to live in. Therefore, I would like you to fix both of the issues at the earliest before these hazards turn into an actual accident. I would also prefer to not be charged for such repairs as the issues persisited before I moved into the apartment.

I would also prefer for you to personally visit the apartment so you can have a closer look and so these issues can be promptly dealt with. Please let me know the exact time and date of your visit so I can be avaliable and please contact me for any further details.

Yours sincerely,

XYZ

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 8.0

The letter covers all three requirements clearly: you describe the electrical faults and leaking sink, request repairs, and ask the manager to visit. The details about repeated short circuits, damaged appliance fuses, and flooding make the problem concrete, while explaining that the faults existed before you moved in supports your request not to pay. Your purpose and requested action remain clear throughout. To make the response even more complete, specify a practical repair arrangement, such as asking the manager to send a qualified electrician and plumber, and briefly indicate the urgency or a suitable timeframe. These are minor opportunities to develop an already well-focused response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.5

The information is organised in a sensible progression: you introduce the purpose, describe the two problems, explain the action you want, and finish by requesting a visit. Paragraphing supports this sequence, and linking expressions such as “Firstly,” “Moreover,” and “Therefore” help the reader follow your points. The final paragraph also combines the visit request with a clear request for confirmation. Some transitions feel slightly formulaic, and the second paragraph moves quickly from the hazards to the request about repair costs. A more explicit link between the pre-existing faults and your expectation that the manager arrange and cover the repairs would make the progression smoother and cohesion more flexible.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of vocabulary for a formal complaint, including “short circuits,” “electrical wiring,” “plumbing,” and “potential safety hazard.” These choices communicate the seriousness of the problem, and phrases such as “at the earliest” and “further details” suit the letter’s purpose. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward: “fuses burned off” would be more naturally expressed as “fuses blew,” and “electrical wring” appears to be a misspelling of “electrical wiring.” “Countless times” is also rather emphatic for a practical complaint. More precise, natural phrasing would strengthen control of collocation and spelling while preserving your clear meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 7.0

The letter includes a useful mix of sentence forms, including complex clauses such as “which is going to cost a lot of money” and “so you can have a closer look.” Many sentences are grammatically clear, and the reader can follow the requests without difficulty. A few errors and awkward constructions remain. In “the majority of my appliances had their fuses burned off,” the passive structure is not formed naturally; use “the fuses in most of my appliances have blown.” The phrase “I would prefer to not be charged” is better ordered as “I would prefer not to be charged,” and “I would also prefer for you to personally visit” would be more accurate as “I would also prefer you to visit.” Correcting these patterns would improve consistency.

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