Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs.

Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter
• describe the problem.
• say what you think should be done about it.
• ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear, Manager

My name is Pawandeep singh from 32.no apartment.Actually, i want to inform you by this letter regarding our electricity shortage in our coummnity hall because we can use electricity in other areas instead of the hall.Therefore,we unable to use hall for society functions.

Furthermore,building staff can solve this issue by checking other electricity box.In order to get solution they need to inspect our main control box which has all my apartment access as well we have a few more queries about the water shortage.

Therefore, you should visit our apartment once so you can understand other facilties as well.Because,

i unable to express everything in this letter so that you should arranged meeting in our society by regarding every hurdle which we are faced in this month

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify an electricity problem in the community hall, explain that it prevents society functions, suggest checking the electrical system, and ask the manager to visit. However, the repair request is not fully clear: “checking other electricity box” and inspecting the “main control box” do not explain precisely what action you want taken. The water shortage and other “hurdle[s]” are introduced without enough detail, so they distract from the main issue. The request to visit is present, but the letter does not clearly ask the manager to inspect the specific problem. The response is also 21 words below the required minimum. Add specific details about when the outage occurs, the repair you are requesting, and what the manager should inspect during a visit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter has a basic sequence: it introduces the problem, suggests an inspection, and asks for a visit. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore” and “Therefore” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the electrical issue shifts to water shortages and then to general “hurdle[s]” without clear transitions or explanation. The final sentence is incomplete after “Because,” and the meeting request is mixed with the request to visit the apartment. Organise the letter into clear paragraphs for the problem, the requested repair, and the visit, and use direct links between each point. This would make the overall progression easier to understand.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for a repair request, including “electricity shortage,” “inspect,” “main control box,” and “water shortage.” These terms help communicate the general subject, but the range is limited and several choices are unclear or unnatural, such as “other electricity box,” “all my apartment access,” and “every hurdle.” Spelling errors in “coummnity” and “facilties” also reduce accuracy. Choose precise phrases that describe the fault and the repair, rather than broad or confusing wording. For example, explain whether the hall has no power, whether a circuit or fuse needs checking, and which facilities are affected. More accurate collocations would make the request clearer and more appropriate for a formal letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and longer sentences, for example, “Therefore, we unable to use hall for society functions” and “In order to get solution they need to inspect our main control box.” However, errors are frequent and sometimes make the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Examples include missing verbs and articles (“we unable,” “use hall”), incorrect verb forms (“you should arranged”), and an incomplete construction beginning “Because,”. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly where several ideas run together. Practise complete sentence patterns, including subject–verb combinations and modal verbs followed by the base form (“should arrange”). Breaking longer sentences into shorter, complete statements will improve control and readability.

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