Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs.

Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter
• describe the problem.
• say what you think should be done about it.
• ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear manager

my name is ramandeep singh and am living in the apartement number 151 on the second floor so form last two days the shower is not working properly some time its showering only cold water and some time the water stop i do the things by myself i remove the shower knob and clean it but its not working so i believe you should call a plumber who can fix this properly and am get rid from this problem

if you want to check it and see this first by yourself you can visit my home today am here for whole day beacuse i have holiday from my work so please do something to solve this as soon as possible because its the only shower which am using my family is very disturbed from this last two days

am look forward from your side

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you explain that the shower alternates between cold water and stopping, suggest calling a plumber, and invite the manager to visit while you are home. The detail that you removed and cleaned the knob also shows what you have already tried. However, the proposed repair and the impact on your family could be explained more fully, and the request to arrange a visit would be clearer with a specific time or request for confirmation. The response is also four words below the required minimum, so it needs a little more relevant detail. Overall, the purpose is clear, though some parts are less developed than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The information follows a sensible order: you introduce yourself and the problem, describe your attempted repair, suggest a plumber, and then invite the manager to inspect it. This makes the letter understandable overall. However, almost the entire message is written as one long paragraph, and the ideas run together without clear sentence boundaries. The repeated use of “so” and “and” also makes the connections feel mechanical. Separate the letter into short paragraphs and use full stops to distinguish the problem, proposed action, and visit request. A conventional closing would also give the letter a clearer ending.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough relevant vocabulary to communicate the issue, including “shower,” “cold water,” “plumber,” and “clean it.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “its showering only cold water,” “fix this properly,” and “am get rid from this problem.” Spelling errors such as “apartement” and “beacuse” also reduce accuracy. These choices do not prevent the reader from understanding the main problem, but they make the letter less clear and natural. Build a wider set of repair-related phrases and check spelling; for example, describe the shower as “only producing cold water” and say you want the issue “resolved.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response communicates its main message, but sentence structures are mostly simple or joined into long strings, with limited control of more complex forms. Some grammatical errors appear in key clauses: “my name is ramandeep singh and am living” omits the subject in the second clause, while “some time its showering only cold water” has problems with the verb construction and sentence form. “Am look forward from your side” also does not form a correct closing sentence. Use complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and punctuate them separately. For instance: “My name is Ramandeep Singh, and I live in apartment 151 on the second floor.” More accurate sentence patterns would make the letter easier to read.

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