Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs.

Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter
• describe the problem.
• say what you think should be done about it.
• ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am a resident of the Apartment 'Seven Hills Castle'. My name is Rani and I stay at the 2nd floor. I want to bring to your notice about certain repairs in the apartment which need to be addressed on priority.

The water tank has some leaks due to which the water is getting wasted. There are some cracks on the ceilings in the ground floor. Also, the walls of the apartment has become very ugly since they are not painted for some years now.

Could you please get the water tank patched with some cement and stone. It is advisable to even apply some cement on the ceilings of the ground floor and then paint the whole apartment as the festival is also near by.

I humbly request you to visit the apartment and inspect the issues I have stated and then take measures to resolve them.

Yours Faithfully,

Rani

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three requested points: you identify the leaking tank, ceiling cracks and unpainted walls, suggest repairs, and ask the manager to inspect the apartment. The request to visit is clear, and the proposed actions make your purpose easy to understand. The ideas are relevant and the letter maintains an appropriate, polite tone. To make the response more fully developed, explain the impact of the damage or give a clearer reason for the urgency; the nearby festival is mentioned, but its connection to the repairs is not explained. Also specify what repair is needed for the tank leak rather than prescribing materials that may not be suitable. These additions would make the proposed action more precise and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: you introduce yourself and the purpose, describe the problems, propose repairs, and close with a request for a visit. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and the reader can follow the main message without difficulty. The list of issues is connected with “Also,” while “since” explains why the walls need attention. However, the progression within the repair paragraph is somewhat mechanical, and the relationship between the festival and the proposed painting is not fully developed. You could improve cohesion by grouping each problem with its corresponding action and using clearer links between the urgency, the repairs, and the requested inspection.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for describing the maintenance issues, with useful terms such as “leaks,” “cracks,” “ceilings,” and “inspect.” You also use polite expressions such as “I humbly request,” which suit a formal letter. Some choices are less natural or precise in this context, including “bring to your notice about,” “patched with some cement and stone,” and “the walls ... has become very ugly.” “On priority” is also an awkward collocation. These choices do not prevent the reader from understanding the problems, but they limit precision and naturalness. Aim for standard maintenance language and concise, idiomatic phrases when describing both the damage and the requested work.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple sentences and more developed structures, including the reason clause “since they are not painted for some years now” and the purpose sequence “visit ... and inspect ... and then take measures.” The message remains understandable throughout. Some grammatical errors are present, however. In “the walls of the apartment has become,” the plural subject requires “have”; “I stay at the 2nd floor” needs a different preposition and a more suitable verb; and “they are not painted for some years” uses an unsuitable tense for a period continuing to the present. There is also an awkward construction in “bring to your notice about.” Review subject–verb agreement, prepositions, and present-perfect forms to improve accuracy while retaining your sentence variety.

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