Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs.

Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter
• describe the problem.
• say what you think should be done about it.
• ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to inform you that I have some issue in my apartment and it is needs to be addressed as soon as possible.

The problem is roof leakage and it has been for 2 months. Firstly when I saw the small amount of water on the roof I was completely ignore it and thought it was from raining water and when I see later it was a crack on the roof which is needs to be repaired.

What I am thinking it should be repaired on the first priority because the water which I was thinking coming from raining water but I was wrong, it was coming from the above apartment's bathroom which is not good for me and I need new roof plaster.

It would be really grateful if you could visit in my apartment and see the problem by yourself and let me know how much time would be taken to resolve this issue.

Thank you for your consideration and I look forward to hearing from you.

Your faithfully,

Tajinder Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three requested points: it identifies a roof leak, proposes repair work, and asks the manager to visit and assess the problem. The explanation that the water is coming from the apartment above adds relevant context, and the request for an estimate of repair time makes the purpose clear. The main ideas are extended with a brief account of how the problem was discovered and how long it has continued. To make the response more fully developed, specify the practical impact of the leak—for example, whether it is damaging the ceiling or belongings—and state more precisely what action you expect the manager to arrange, such as inspecting the upstairs bathroom and organising a repair. The formal letter format is appropriate overall.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The message has a clear overall progression: it introduces the issue, explains how it was discovered, gives a proposed response, and ends with a visit request and polite closing. Paragraphing helps separate these functions, and linking expressions such as “Firstly” and “because” show how some ideas relate. This meets the lower-band expectation of a coherent overall arrangement. However, the progression is not always smooth: the second paragraph combines the discovery of the leak with the mistaken assumption about rain, while the next paragraph repeats that contrast and shifts abruptly to the upstairs bathroom. Use clearer sequencing and references—for example, separate the history from the requested repair, and make explicit how the bathroom above caused the ceiling leak. This would make cohesion less mechanical and more flexible.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the central problem and request, with relevant terms such as “roof leakage,” “crack,” “repaired,” and “resolve this issue.” The writer also uses a suitably polite register in phrases such as “I would be really grateful” and “Thank you for your consideration.” However, the range is limited and several choices or combinations sound unnatural, which sometimes makes the reader pause: “roof leakage” is less natural here than “a leak in the ceiling,” and “raining water” is not idiomatic. “First priority” and “new roof plaster” are also imprecise for the intended repair. Build a more precise set of repair-related expressions and check common collocations so the message sounds clear and professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The letter attempts both simple and more complex sentences, including a time clause in “when I saw the small amount of water” and a conditional-style polite request beginning “It would be really grateful if…”. These attempts show some range, but control is inconsistent, and errors in verb forms and sentence construction can make parts difficult to follow. For example, “it is needs to be addressed” combines incompatible verb forms, while “I was completely ignore it” needs a past-tense verb. The long sentence beginning “Firstly” also contains several clauses that are not joined clearly. Practise forming accurate past-tense narratives and polite request structures, and divide long explanations into shorter sentences. This will improve clarity while preserving the range you are attempting.

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