Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have a problem in your apartment that needs repairs.

Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter
• describe the problem.
• say what you think should be done about it.
• ask the building manager to visit your apartment to see the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear _________,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Allision,

I hope you are having a good day. I just wanted to bring your attention toward the problem my roommate is facing with the newly installed electronic door lock.

Actually, the replacement of manual door lock to electronic fob key brings more convinience for me but also a hard time for my friend. My fob works great , it unlock and lock the door in one touch however, Juastin's fob gives him a hard time. I tried to unlock with his fob but it does not work in first time therefore we requested the new fob from building coordinater but does the same thing.

I think the malfunction is not in fob the whole lock needs to be changed.

I would really appriciate if you spare some time to take a look at our door lock.This is essential since we have to in and out of apartment at diffrent times which makes it diffucult for us.

I hope i will getfollow up soon.

Yours Faithfully

Karanpa

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three requirements: it explains that the roommate’s replacement fob does not reliably operate the electronic lock, proposes that the lock itself be replaced, and asks Allison to visit and inspect it. The practical impact is also made clear in the point that the residents come and go at different times. These details give the request a clear purpose and support the proposed solution. To make the response more fully developed, specify what happens when the fob fails—for example, whether the roommate is unable to enter without help—and make the visit request more direct by suggesting a suitable time or asking the manager to arrange one. The position and requested action are clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information follows a sensible sequence: you introduce the issue, explain the failed replacement fob, suggest a repair, and request an inspection. Paragraph breaks help distinguish the problem from the proposed action and closing request. Linking phrases such as “however” and “therefore” show the relationship between events, and the letter format is appropriate. Some connections are less smooth: “Actually” does not add much, and the transition from the replacement fob still failing to the conclusion that the whole lock needs changing could be explained more clearly. The final request and the reason for it are also crowded together. Separating these points and using more precise references would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “electronic door lock,” “fob,” “malfunction,” and “building coordinator,” so the reader can understand the central problem. There is some attempt to use more specific language, but several spelling errors and awkward word choices reduce precision and naturalness: “convinience,” “coordinater,” “appriciate,” and “diffucult” are examples. Phrases such as “brings more convenience” and “gives him a hard time” are understandable but less suitable for a formal request to a building manager. Aim for accurate spelling and conventional collocations, such as “provides greater convenience” and “is difficult to operate.” This would make the vocabulary more controlled and appropriate to the letter’s purpose.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “however” and a reason introduced by “since.” The main message remains understandable, but errors in sentence construction and verb forms are noticeable. For example, “it unlock and lock the door” needs subject–verb agreement and parallel verb forms, while “does not work in first time” has an incorrect article and phrasing. The sentence beginning “I tried to unlock with his fob” also needs a clear object, such as “the door.” Punctuation is sometimes faulty, particularly the comma splice in “My fob works great, it unlock…” and missing spaces after full stops. Practise checking each sentence for a complete structure, agreement, and punctuation.

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