Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Sending childrens to school at the age of three or four years old by parents butr few parents wait until their children get old enough for school.

To commence with, advantages fitstly during the age of threee to four childrens have a great ability to adapt any environment and its good time period where they can learn quickly.In other words children at the age of three or four their brain funtion is very powerfull and fast learner,children can easily focus on study and it can sharp their brain funtion and may not find difficulty to resolve any problem and become quick decision maker in future.For example in past year magazine USA conducted a survey taking both three year old childrens total ten. one group of 5 which goes to school other not and survey person conduct and exam or various activites in which childrens who goes to school shoes more energy and gives anwer faster then other childrens.Therefore,sending childrens in school at young age is berneficial for their overall growth especially brain funtion.

Shifting towards the disadvantages of sending children to school at the age of three or four,it is also impact on their brain and may get under the pressure. To explicate it,between the age of three or four childrens needs to be free and out of any fights of parents and em,otional drama which could effect their brain because childrens adapt it quickly same as at school children goes to school, faces some ristritions and only focus on study.Children learnes whatever their teacher tech could also effect their behaviour.For instance,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both sides of the question: the first main paragraph argues that preschool can support learning and brain development, while the next raises concerns about pressure and restrictions. The example of a survey is relevant in principle, but its details are difficult to follow and it is not clearly connected to the claim. The disadvantages are less fully explained, and the response ends with “For instance,” without completing the example or giving a concluding summary. As a result, the discussion is partial and the ideas remain under-developed. To strengthen the response, explain specific benefits and drawbacks, support each with a clear example, and finish with a conclusion that sums up your discussion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic overall structure: an opening, a paragraph on advantages, and a paragraph on disadvantages. Signposting such as “To commence with” and “Shifting towards the disadvantages” helps identify the two sides. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow, particularly in the survey example, where the groups, test, and findings are not clearly presented. Connectors such as “In other words” and “Therefore” sometimes repeat or introduce ideas without making their relationship clear. The final paragraph stops abruptly, so the response lacks a complete ending. Use clearer topic sentences, arrange each paragraph around one main point, and link examples directly to the point they support.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “adapt,” “overall growth,” “pressure,” and “restrictions.” These choices show some ability to discuss learning and child development, but the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response harder to understand, such as “funtion,” “ristritions,” and “shoes more energy.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “brain function is very powerful” and “fights of parents and emotional drama.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “cognitive development,” “social skills,” and “academic pressure” would help you express the ideas clearly without relying on repeated references to the brain.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use clauses to explain reasons, as in “because children adapt it quickly,” but complex structures are often faulty and sentence boundaries are not consistently controlled. For example, “children at the age of three or four their brain…” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “Sending childrens to school…” is an incomplete opening sentence. There are also recurring problems with agreement, articles, plurals, and verb forms, as in “children needs,” “children learnes,” and “teacher tech.” These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with correctly formed clauses, and use full stops to separate complete ideas.

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