Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

While some parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before sending them to school, others send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old.

Sending children to school when they are three or four years old has more advantages than disadvantages. I believe that when parents send their children to school at that age, the children would be able to learn fast. for example, a child who is a slow learner would catch up on time if they start primary school at this early age. Another reason is that some parents work in a private organisation which require them to resume their duties in the morning and closes in the afternoon. During their working hour, their children would be in school and the parent would not have to struggle with caring for their todlers and work at the same time.

On the other hand, some parents would wait until their children are old enough for primary school before sending them because they believe the children would have grown to a stage where they can express themselves in school and also tell their parents the activities that happened in school. For instance, a child who is not able to talk yet cannot tell the parents how they feel about the school and the things that happened in school. for example, if a teacher beats a child in school or a child is being bullied at school, the young ones won't be able to express themselves at home .

In conclusion, sending children to preschool at early age has a lot of advantages such as releiving their parents from babysiting at work and it aslo helps the children to learn fast. Others send children to primary school when they are older so that they would be able to express their feelings clearly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the question and state a clear view that preschool has more advantages. The points about children learning early and parents managing work are relevant, as is the concern that very young children may not be able to report bullying or mistreatment. However, the discussion is only partly developed: the claim that a slow learner will “catch up on time” is not explained, and the work-related benefit is presented mainly from the parents’ perspective rather than considering the child’s experience. The response would be stronger with fuller explanation and a specific, relevant example for each main point. The conclusion restates the main ideas but does not add much to the discussion. The 44 words copied from the task prompt are excluded from the reported response length.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph presenting advantages, a paragraph presenting disadvantages, and a conclusion. This makes the main direction understandable. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and connections between ideas are sometimes mechanical or unclear. For example, “Another reason” introduces the work point, while “For instance” and then “for example” repeat the same function in the disadvantages paragraph. The opening repeats the task’s contrast rather than establishing a more purposeful introduction, and the conclusion largely repeats earlier points. Improve cohesion by grouping each paragraph around one clear claim, explaining it in sequence, and using referencing and linking phrases only where they clarify the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “preschool,” “primary school,” “slow learner,” and “bullied.” However, the range is limited and several choices or spellings are inaccurate, which makes the writing less precise. Examples include “todlers,” “releiving,” “babysiting,” and “aslo”; these should be corrected to “toddlers,” “relieving,” “babysitting,” and “also.” Some phrasing is also awkward, such as “learn fast” and “the activities that happened in school.” Aim for more precise, natural expressions and check spelling carefully. A wider range of accurate vocabulary would help you explain the educational and social effects more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “when,” “because,” and “if,” so there is some variety. However, control is inconsistent, and errors occur in sentence boundaries, agreement, and verb forms. For example, “for example” begins a sentence with a lowercase letter, and “some parents work in a private organisation which require them” has a subject–verb agreement error; “closes” also does not agree with the plural subject “organisation” as used in the clause. The sentence about a child who “is not able to talk yet” is understandable, but the surrounding phrasing could be structured more clearly. Practise checking each sentence for a clear subject and verb, correct agreement, and appropriate capitalisation and punctuation.

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