Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Three or four year old teenagers some guardians send them to institute. Others wait for their children old enough than them them to primary school. This essay will discuss both benefits and drawbacks regarding sending their children early age and older age.

One major advantages is early age children are send to schools by parents because they improve communication skills and confidents comes early. Teenagers in a class talk with classmate, and they enhance their communication. Beside this, boost their skill will assist them in upcoming decade to speak with another culture persons, means they are from any country like UNITED KINGDOM, make better friendship. In addition, early admission in primary schools will help for children to enhance their confident in early stage of the life. They will help them in upcoming decade especially in presentation in higher education level system, yet they present some thing In front of many learners. For example, in my family the elder brother was send in early stage of life by my parents to school level, so now he is intelligent also the person with more confident and they are strong communication and speaking skills also.

However, one significant disadvantages is to send teenagers in a early life that they will remain away from family and disturb their sleeping routine. Minors send to school they feel loneliness in institute because they away from their parents, brothers and sisters as a result they become in stress. Another crucial point is that wake up in early morning for schools may disturb their routine which they become unhappy, and may effect their brain due to little sleep.

Finally, sending adolescents in tiny age to primary institution will help them increase their communication skill as well is become more confident, but some drawbacks such a fell loneliness in a school and effect their sleeping routine.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the topic by discussing communication and confidence as benefits, and separation from family and disrupted sleep as drawbacks. The family example gives one point a personal illustration. However, the response only partially develops the task: it shifts between preschool and “primary schools,” although the question is specifically about preschool, and it does not clearly explain why starting at three or four is advantageous or disadvantageous compared with waiting until primary school. Some claims, such as early schooling making a child “intelligent,” are asserted rather than explained. To strengthen the response, keep the focus on preschool and develop each main idea with a clear explanation and a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on advantages, a paragraph on disadvantages, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “In addition,” “However,” and “Finally” helps readers follow the broad direction. However, connections within paragraphs are sometimes mechanical, and some references are unclear—for example, “They will help them” does not clearly identify who or what “they” refers to. The conclusion repeats the main points but does not resolve the comparison between preschool and waiting for primary school. Improve progression by organising each body paragraph around one clear point, then explaining its consequence, and use pronouns only when their reference is unmistakable.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “communication skills,” “confident,” “loneliness,” and “sleeping routine,” and use some linking expressions to present ideas. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “three or four year old teenagers,” “institute” for a preschool or school, and “another culture persons.” There is also repetition of “upcoming decade” and “communication.” Choose precise terms for young children and early education, and learn common combinations such as “develop confidence,” “interact with classmates,” and “disrupt a child’s sleep routine.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a cause-and-effect construction with “as a result,” and the reader can generally identify the main points. However, the range is limited, and errors in sentence formation and verb forms are frequent enough to make some sentences difficult to understand. For example, “children are send to schools” needs a passive form such as “are sent,” while “the elder brother was send” should be “was sent.” The opening sentence is also incomplete or confusing, and “they become in stress” does not form a correct grammatical pattern. Practise building complete subject–verb sentences, checking agreement and verb forms, and using articles consistently.

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