Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In my opinion,other parents send their children three to four years old because they want their child to learn a lot and they become advanced in the school and to developed their skill and become more creative and productive.Other parents also busy on their work so they enrolled their child in the school even if they are young.

Its an advantage of the child when go to school when they are young to have a good communication and to become how to participate in the activities.They also help to how to listen to a teacher and become behave in the class.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response is relevant to the topic and identifies some possible benefits of preschool, including learning, developing skills, becoming more creative, communicating, and participating in activities. However, it addresses the task only partially: it gives little explanation of these points and does not discuss disadvantages, despite this being a central part of the question. The comment that parents may be busy is also introduced without being developed. The response contains 101 words, so it does not meet the required minimum of 250 words. To improve, state a clear overall view, explain both advantages and disadvantages, and support each main point with a specific reason or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to group related ideas: the first paragraph mentions parents’ reasons for choosing preschool, and the second focuses on possible benefits for children. The ideas are generally connected to the topic, but the response has no clear overall progression or conclusion, and the discussion stops before the task is fully explored. Connections between points are also limited; for example, the move from children learning to parents being busy is abrupt. Use separate paragraphs for the introduction, advantages, disadvantages, and conclusion, and connect each point with clear transitions such as “One benefit is…” and “However…”.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main topic, with relevant terms such as “preschool,” “communication,” “participate,” and “activities.” However, the range is limited, and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “child,” “school,” and “become.” Some expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “learn a lot,” “advanced in the school,” and “good communication.” More precise vocabulary would help explain the ideas clearly—for example, describing children as developing social skills or becoming familiar with classroom routines. Aim to use a wider range of topic-specific terms and check that phrases sound natural in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response mainly uses simple sentence patterns, with an attempt to connect ideas using “because” and “so.” However, the range is limited, and errors in sentence construction and verb forms are frequent enough to make some parts difficult to follow. For example, “when go to school” lacks a subject, while “to developed their skill” uses an incorrect verb form. The opening sentence also joins several ideas without clear sentence boundaries, and punctuation is inconsistent. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check verb forms after “to” and after modal or linking structures. More accurate sentence control will make your ideas easier to understand.

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