Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

There is no denying fact that deciding the age of the child that is best to sent to school has became a global debate. Majority of folks are in favor of sending children in young age due to number of merit. However some of the people highlights its demerits.

Initiating with the benefits of same, the first and the foremost key benefits is that child becomes self dependent at young age. For instance if the child is sent to school at young age will have lunches or use washroom on his own whereas, on the other hand there will be presence of assistance at home while doing his own chores at home. Another benefits is that the child’s social life began. For example child make friends as is surrounded by number of children which help them end their social awkwardness.

On its darker side some of the drawbacks which makes it problematic is that the child is not in an age can be unsafe in some cases. For example, in school in the pressure or influence the child can make wrong decisions and hurt them self while playing as due to number of children in school the teacher would not be able to assist each and every child individually.

In conclusion to the above statement, neither the pros can be neglected nor the cons. It is a mixed bag of positive and negative. So while taking such decisions nothing should be underestimated or neglected because it may effect the child’s growth and development.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both advantages and disadvantages of preschool. However, the development of ideas is limited. For example, the point about 'self-dependence' is mentioned, but the explanation is slightly confusing, contrasting school assistance with home assistance in a way that lacks clarity. The discussion of disadvantages is also brief and lacks specific, well-developed examples. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your points with more detailed explanations and concrete examples. The position is clear, but the overall depth of the argument is somewhat superficial, which limits the score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Initiating with', 'For instance', and 'On its darker side'. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'Initiating with the benefits of same'. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the comparison between home and school chores is muddled. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that cohesive devices are used more naturally will help improve your score in this area.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You use some informal phrasing like 'folks' and 'number of merit', which is not ideal for an academic essay. There are also some word-choice errors, such as 'deciding the age of the child that is best to sent to school' (should be 'sending') and 'effect the child's growth' (should be 'affect'). To improve, focus on using more academic collocations and precise terminology related to child development and education.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with verb forms ('best to sent'), subject-verb agreement ('benefits is'), and sentence structure. For example, 'if the child is sent to school at young age will have lunches' is grammatically incomplete. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty, which can occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and a correctly conjugated verb, and proofread carefully to catch minor errors in articles and prepositions.

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