Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Nowadays, many individuals are enrolling their children in preschooling in the early age before they become attain certain age to attend primary school. This phenomena is rising among parents frequently. There are the number of merits and demerits of the same. In the following paragraphs both advantages and disadvantages will be discussed along with suitable conclusion.

Initiating with the benefits of sending children to preschool in early age. Firstly, it help to children in various way like develop the sense of sitting in the school without crying and attending short classes. Along with development of discipline in them. These are very important things which should be learn by the kids in early age. Secondly, preschooling allows them to start with other students as a result they tends to make new friends. In addition to this preschooling also helps to build the basic of education in early age which helps them further in primary education. For example, childrens learn basic concepts of writing and reading in early school would help them to perform better in the primary school them the other children who did not enroled in preschool.

On the other hand there are some drawbacks also which effect the children health both mentally and physically. They get pressurized under studies in the childhood which correctly impact there physical growth also do less time aloted for playing and restrictions on them to learn things. Moreover, less time will develop in them in relation to there parents because most of time of childhood they spent in school. Subsequently, there early age childhood is pushed toward study in school which can be started after certain age. Some students learn bad habits from other children in school which is negative development for them. Parents can focus more on there child in early age to develop good morals and habits in them by spending time along with child.

In conclusion I think, it totally depends on parents to enroll their child in preschool in age of four year or wait for certain period. But there are its both benifical and damagrous for children, not its pros can be neglected with its cons. It is a mix bag of positive and negative development.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of preschooling as required by the prompt. The position is clear, and the ideas are relevant. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the point about 'bad habits' is mentioned but not fully explored or supported with a concrete example. While the task is addressed, the depth of analysis could be improved to reach a higher band. The conclusion is a bit repetitive and lacks a strong summary of the main points, but it does fulfill the requirement to discuss both sides.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the argument. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', 'On the other hand', and 'Moreover'. However, some of these are used in a mechanical way, and there are instances where the flow is slightly disrupted by awkward phrasing, such as 'This phenomena is rising'. The referencing is generally clear, but the transition between ideas could be smoother to improve the overall progression of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher levels. There are several instances of word-choice errors and non-standard collocations, such as 'preschooling in the early age' (instead of 'at an early age'), 'correctly impact' (likely meant 'negatively impact'), and 'damagrous' (a spelling error). While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, and the errors occasionally draw attention to the language rather than the content.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('it help to children', 'they tends to make'), article misuse ('in the early age'), and incorrect word forms ('enroled', 'benifical'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the frequency of errors in basic grammar structures is noticeable. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are persistent enough to limit the score in this criterion.

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