Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
What age is perfect for the two or four years old child for schooling. It is still debatable issue for parents to decide when they admission their children in primary school either get old enough or in advanced age. while in this case it has some pros and cons which will be explain in upcoming paragraphs.
what is the ideal age for child to start school? This remains a debatable issue among parents, as some assert that children should begin primary school at a young age, while others argue they should wait until they are more mature. Starting school early or later has both advantages and disadvantages which be discussed in upcoming paragraphs.
This remains a debatable issue among parents, as some believe that children should begin primary school at a young age, while others argue that they should wait until they are more mature. Starting school early or later has both advantages and disadvantages, which will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 163 words. Furthermore, the content is severely underdeveloped. The essay consists of repetitive introductory paragraphs and fails to actually discuss the advantages and disadvantages of preschool as requested. Because the response is significantly under-length and lacks the necessary development of ideas, it does not address the task requirements in a meaningful way.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. The text repeats the same introductory ideas three times in slightly different ways, which creates a disjointed and confusing reading experience. There is no paragraphing to separate the advantages from the disadvantages, and the lack of a body section means there is no progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are absent, and the repetitive nature of the text makes it difficult to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'debatable issue' and 'pros and cons' are used multiple times due to the redundant nature of the writing. There is no attempt to use a wider range of vocabulary or more sophisticated collocations related to education or child development. The word choice is functional but limited, and the repetition significantly hinders the quality of the expression.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammar contains several errors, such as 'when they admission their children' (incorrect verb form) and 'which be discussed' (missing auxiliary verb). The sentence structures are simple and repetitive. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of complex sentence structures and the presence of basic grammatical errors limit the score. The writing lacks the variety and control required for higher bands.
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