Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some parents admit their children to pre school programs for playgroup activities for learning while other parents admit their children to primary school when they are five or 6 years old soo children are old enough to do care their themselves or have potty training.Both types of parent have different idiology related to school commencing era and both types of ideology have pros and cons.

The benefit of sending toodlers to preschool are giving their toodlers to have playtime with other kids of thier same age.Having day time at preschool,children will have more scheduled eating,napping ,playtime and sleep time.Children will train accordingly to their happits and mood.If children live in nuclear family system,then he has not any interaction with other kids.So that’s why, by giving them preschool era he will have less social anxiety ,not having any difficulty in making friends and more strength to avoid bullying.

But prechool also have some disadvantages like having less time with parents if parents have working lifestyles.Parents give learning or exposure to their children in other ways like taking them to museums,disney lands,playlands and aqua parks or taking them to their relatives.Parents can also engage their kids with themselves like cooking or gardening.

Toodlers feel more enjoyable with their parents and they feel difficulty to set themselves in new environment without their parents.Toodlers also feel lonely without their siblings or parents.They are more habitual in homes rather than preschool.

I also faced some difficulties form my daughter to engage her in preschool because she was much engaged with me.But some how else i managed

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both advantages and disadvantages of preschool. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention social benefits like avoiding bullying and routine building, the arguments regarding disadvantages are less clearly structured and rely heavily on personal anecdotes rather than broader societal or developmental perspectives. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully extended with clear explanations or illustrative examples that go beyond personal experience. The introduction is a bit repetitive, and the conclusion is missing, which affects the overall clarity of your position.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'So that’s why' or 'But'. The transition between ideas is often abrupt, and the logical flow within paragraphs could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'conversely', 'consequently'). Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when switching between the child's perspective and the parents' perspective. Improving the variety of transition signals would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. There are several spelling errors (e.g., 'toodlers', 'idiology', 'happits', 'prechool') and some awkward word choices, such as 'school commencing era' and 'admit their children'. While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'nuclear family system', the overall range is limited. To improve, focus on using more precise academic collocations and ensure you proofread for basic spelling mistakes, as these errors occasionally distract the reader from your main points.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'prechool also have'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'he has not any interaction'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents the text from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence structure, particularly the correct use of articles and verb tenses, will help improve your accuracy.

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