Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Plethora of parents send their children to kindergarden when they are below five years of age while others wait until their children are old enough before they send them to primary school. One major adavantage of sending the children to preschool at the early stage might help them adapt to the nature of school very quickly however, as the children are too young there might be a difficulty in understanding and listening which creates problems to the staffs.

The key advantage of sending the children to school at the early stage enables them to rapidly adapt to the nature of the studying environment.They will try to interact with their peers and teachers. Children will also get used to being away from their parents. They will be learning on how to hold a pencil and scribble on the notebook which strengthens their fingers which severs a bridge in writing letters and numbers. Additionally, they will also learn about the habit of sharing and unity which is indused into them at the young stage. For instance, a recent survey collected from the staffs working in a government school concluded that children who are sent to kindergarden are more likely to work as a team on team activity while the other students are not good enough to work along with peers.

On the other hand, the distadvantages of children joining the kindergarden below five years is they might find difficulty to behave calm. They might feel that they should wander aroun the places. The ability of understanding and listening takes time to be incorporated to the children. The teachers will find it difficult to handle as they kids are too young o understamd the comments from them. For instance,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of preschool education. The ideas are relevant and generally well-supported, such as the discussion on social development and fine motor skills. However, the essay is incomplete; the final paragraph ends abruptly mid-sentence ('For instance, '), which means the conclusion is missing. This is a significant omission that prevents the response from being fully developed. While the position is clear, the lack of a concluding summary and the unfinished final point limit the score to a 6.0, as the task is not fully addressed in its entirety.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Additionally,' 'On the other hand,' and 'For instance.' However, the flow is occasionally mechanical. The abrupt ending of the final paragraph significantly disrupts the coherence of the piece. While the progression of ideas is logical in the first two paragraphs, the failure to complete the final thought and the absence of a concluding paragraph mean that the overall structure is incomplete, which affects the logical flow of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, though there are several spelling errors and awkward collocations. Examples include 'kindergarden' (kindergarten), 'indused' (induced), 'severs a bridge' (which is an incorrect idiom here), and 'aroun' (around). While the student attempts to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'social development' or 'peer interaction,' the errors in spelling and word choice are frequent enough to be noticeable. The range is sufficient to convey the intended meaning, but it lacks the precision and control required for a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'a difficulty in understanding and listening which creates problems to the staffs' (should be 'staff') and 'as they kids are too young o understamd' (typos and incorrect article usage). Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structure is sometimes repetitive. While the errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to suggest a lack of control over more complex grammatical forms. The unfinished sentence at the end also contributes to the lack of grammatical completeness.

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