Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

many parents believe that children need to go to preschool when they are too young and some others wait till the child are old enough for primary school before sending to the regular one. the both side have there own pros and cons so we will bot the side in our upcoming paragraph.

to begin with in this todays world specially in the young age of child they are not enough capable of anything and added that they are not very good communication and making friends because even at this young age all the time they are spending on mobile or computer and playing video game and their parents directly say no to them so that way they need to send their child to preschool they will learn how to make friends how to communicate with other people and futhermore they will start doing their work by them own and moreover they will learn some new skills. Ex the study conducted in uk on difference between the child who go to school and who don't go the their primary school and in result child who went to they were try to do their work and onthe other side the child who do go to the school they were totally depanded on their parents.

on the other side some parents too protected about their child they always look after him because of at this young of their child they thought their child is still not old enough to send him to the primary school they teach him at home and wait till he become old enough for regular school they are wright by their side and in some child are very weak they can't even think like a normal child so that's why some parents wait till their children to become old enough

in conclusion, child need to learn new skill and they need to make some friends and they needs be good at their communication because this world is moving very fast child has to good from young age for that they need to go pres

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of preschool. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention social skills and independence as advantages, the explanation is repetitive and lacks depth. The disadvantages section is also underdeveloped, focusing primarily on parental protectiveness rather than broader educational or developmental concerns. The conclusion is incomplete, cutting off mid-sentence, which prevents a clear summary of your position. To improve, ensure each paragraph provides a clear topic sentence followed by a well-explained example or logical expansion, and always complete your final paragraph to provide a sense of closure.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. You use some cohesive devices like 'to begin with' and 'on the other side', but they are often used mechanically. There is a lack of logical progression between sentences, making the flow feel disjointed. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'the both side have there own pros and cons', where the connection to the previous sentence is awkward. Paragraphing is present, but the abrupt ending of the conclusion significantly impacts the overall coherence of the piece. Focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring each sentence builds logically upon the last.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and often repetitive. You rely on simple terms like 'good', 'child', and 'work', which limits your ability to express complex ideas. There are several instances of incorrect word choice and collocation, such as 'not enough capable' instead of 'not yet capable' and 'too protected' instead of 'overprotective'. Spelling errors, such as 'futhermore', 'depanded', and 'wright', are frequent and occasionally distract the reader. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to child development and education, and pay closer attention to word forms and standard spelling conventions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('the child are', 'child need to learn'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, lacking proper punctuation. For example, 'the both side have there own pros and cons so we will bot the side in our upcoming paragraph' is grammatically incorrect and difficult to follow. You rely almost exclusively on simple sentence structures. To improve, you need to practice using complex sentences with subordinate clauses and ensure that basic grammatical rules regarding plurals and verb tenses are applied consistently.

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