Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The case of some parents send their children to preschool at the age three or four years old had an opposite way because other parents wait until ther children become old enough. maybe in one hand it's good for childrens at a young age to integrate very quickly at school and had enaugh knowledge. and in the other hand it's bad for them when we talk about freedom to play and accurate much love from parents.

It's true that sending children to preschool at a young age helps them to ameliorate some knowwledge . to undrestand what the meaning of respecting teacher and finding the best way to integrate with others collegues. althouw it's a good opportunise to give them some space to finding new frends and playing with them because i remembre it's not an educational section for one handred percent. they will find the section more enjoyble and intertainement.

But in other hands, people think thats not good to send them children at a young age to preschool. they found that will be more stressfull and much borring for them. especially when putting them behind the wall of preschool. it restricts their freedom to play and it will affect their behaviours. while also they think that children at that age they still need much love fron parents . that gives him a good approche to améliorate their personality and good behaviours.

In conclusion , while sending theire children to preschool at a young age, it's benefits are great overall, especially in terms of knowlege devollopment and integrety, while also it may have some drawbacks when we talks about freedom.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of preschool as required by the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. For example, the points regarding 'freedom to play' and 'parental love' are mentioned in both the second and third paragraphs without significant expansion. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments lack depth and specific, well-developed examples. To improve, you should focus on elaborating on each point with a clear explanation or a concrete example rather than listing multiple points briefly. The conclusion is present but does not fully synthesize the arguments presented in the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'on the other hand' being used as 'in the other hand' or 'in other hands'. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, and the transition between sentences is not always smooth. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly with pronouns like 'they' or 'it', which makes it difficult to track the subject matter. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will significantly enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and contains frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'ameliorate' used incorrectly for 'gain', 'knowwledge', 'undrestand', 'collegues', and 'intertainement'. While you attempt to use some academic vocabulary, these errors often impede the reader's understanding. The range is sufficient to communicate basic ideas, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. You should focus on learning the correct spelling and usage of common academic terms and collocations to ensure your meaning is conveyed accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is low. Frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'some parents send... had an opposite way'), article usage, and sentence construction (e.g., 'the case of some parents send their children') occur throughout the text. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. These errors are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence patterns and proofreading for common grammatical slips like verb tense consistency and pluralization.

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