Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Sending preschool to children are have some advantage or disvantage. There are group of people who send their children to preschool when they are in age of 3 to 4 years, ratherthan some wait for their children to growup and send them in primary school. I believe that, sending children to perschool have some advantages, despite keeping them at home until their age is info for primary school. Some pros and cons will be discussed below in essay.

Firstly, there are some advantages, sending children to preschool. The children learn about some basic thing in preschool, which helps them to understanding learning later when they are in primary school. They adpate the culture of schools, how they learns how to sit properly and some good manners, which help them in school. They learn how to make friend and they are spending some out which helps them to develop how to lives without parents, ratherthan, staying at home all times, which makes them less active and boring. The study by oxford researcher, showed that children how started going to perschool in early age they proform good in studies, ratherthan, other students.

Secondly, some disadvantages, the children Who started preschool in early ages have more stress about life, when they are mature, because they feel they started to early but they do not become any things in life. Moreover, they children who started direct form primary school, spent more time with there parent have less stress about life, because they learn a lot about daily life form their parent. For example they went to shopping with their parent and do little things which neccessery in daily life. The study ahowed that, this children have more particle learning, ratherthan other childern.

In conclusion, there are some advantages and disadvantages of sending children to perschool rather sending them diractly primary school. Both have different aspect of it which have discussed in essay.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both advantages and disadvantages of preschool. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding 'stress' in later life as a disadvantage are somewhat speculative and lack logical depth. While the essay covers the requirements, the points are under-developed and rely on generalizations. The position is clear, but the supporting evidence, such as the mention of an 'Oxford researcher,' is vague and lacks specific detail to be truly persuasive. To improve, you should focus on providing more concrete, logical explanations for your points rather than relying on unsupported claims.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, the phrase 'ratherthan' is used repeatedly and incorrectly as a transition. Additionally, some sentences are disjointed, making the progression of ideas feel repetitive. While there is an attempt to use linking words like 'Firstly' and 'Moreover,' the overall flow is hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of variety in cohesive devices. Improving the transition between sentences and using a wider range of linking words would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'adpate' for 'adapt,' 'proform' for 'perform,' and 'particle' for 'practical.' These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. The range of vocabulary is basic, and there is little attempt to use less common or more precise lexical items. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning correct collocations and expanding your range of academic vocabulary. Proofreading for common spelling mistakes and ensuring words are used in the correct context is essential for improvement.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('children learn... how they learns'), incorrect sentence structure ('Sending preschool to children are have some advantage'), and misuse of prepositions and articles. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. The majority of the sentences contain errors, which prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction, correct verb tenses, and subject-verb agreement will help you build a stronger foundation for more complex grammatical structures.

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