Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some guidance drop there kids in play school,when they are around 4 years old and some parents wait for their children are 7 years old to send for primary school.I am talking about both benefit and disadvantage.

First there are a lot of benefits if parents send there child in daycare schools .parents do there work easily,they have no tensions about there kids , child laearn lot of things in schools like greeting,good manners.when kids at play school mother also do are job without any issues because some play school give the time periods 8to 6pm.

Other hands there are some disadvantage if parents send there’s child at daycare centre firstly spend so much time in daycare that’s way there don’t love our parents they love toy and cartoon.and child like the play with games not parents . Parents and children not attached emotionally when they go school early around 2.5and3 .

In my opinion is send there’s child children in play school is not good for both.according to me that is the golden period for child .i think parents are the first teacher is our kids.when child stay at home with there family they connect with emotionally .and the children feel safe .rhey also play with parents when she / he at home .one research for India in 2025 children have no manners and they not give respect there alder which are going in play school.

In conclusion play school are good .parents do there work with any problem.but children not attracted emotionally with there parents.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of preschool as requested. However, the development of ideas is limited. For example, the argument regarding emotional attachment is repetitive and lacks depth, relying on generalizations rather than well-supported points. The position is somewhat contradictory; while you mention benefits in the first body paragraph, the conclusion states that preschool is 'not good,' which creates confusion regarding your overall stance. To improve, ensure that each point is fully extended with clear explanations and that your position remains consistent throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. Transitions between ideas are often missing or mechanical, such as 'First' and 'Other hands.' The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, which hinders the flow of the argument. For instance, the transition 'that’s way' is used incorrectly to mean 'that is why.' Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the connection between sentences. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring clear paragraph structure would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, often relying on simple terms like 'good,' 'work,' and 'kids.' There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'guidance' instead of 'parents,' 'there' instead of 'their,' and 'alder' instead of 'elders.' These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including more precise nouns, verbs, and adjectives, and pay closer attention to spelling and word forms to ensure your meaning is conveyed accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('mother also do are job'), incorrect pronoun usage ('there kids'), and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with many run-on sentences and missing spaces after commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar limits the score. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and pronouns before attempting more complex structures.

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