Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Now days parents send their chidren to preschool when they are three four year olds and the other parents send their children direct the big school . They did not send their children to the preschool . There are many advantage and disadvantage of this cause .In this eassy I will give you some advantage and disadvantages . and I also give the reason .

firstly some parents send their children to the preschool when they are three or four year . There are many reasons why they should DO THIfirstly if they send their children in the small school. i think its good gor then because when they children went to the school they are very depressed and everthing new for them so they face many diffcults . they get out their home they meet the new children and they also think what they doing i personly think that they can understand every think easly and they have a good experince after that so i think its a good . there also disadvantages of this thinks i think children go in bad thinks many children have not good nature and this think also effectable for the other i think teenage could be involved in bad habits rapedly . because they have no experince .

some parents send their children in the primary school . their children learn best thinks their base begining good and they get good position in their class there are also disadvantage if this so some student could not understand this they waste there many time in the other things they could not concetrat you work easly and they face many problems .

in concluion, its my personl opinion that chilfren should send the primary school . its canbe they face many many problems my they get good result and they will not involved in the bad things . so i think it is good for them .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both preschool and primary school entry, but the development of ideas is limited. While you mention advantages like social interaction and disadvantages like exposure to bad habits, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack specific, logical examples. The position is somewhat unclear, as the conclusion contradicts the earlier points made about the benefits of early schooling. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-explained point with a clear link to the prompt. Avoid generalizations and focus on providing concrete reasoning for your claims.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by unclear transitions and repetitive phrasing. While you use basic cohesive devices like 'firstly' and 'in conclusion', the connections between sentences are often weak or confusing. For example, the transition between the benefits of preschool and the potential for 'bad habits' is abrupt. The use of referencing is also problematic, as it is often unclear what 'this' or 'it' refers to in your sentences. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each sentence follows logically from the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'good', 'bad', and 'things'. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'eassy', 'personly', and 'effectable', which occasionally make the meaning difficult to follow. You attempt to use some topic-related vocabulary, but it is often used incorrectly or in an unnatural way. To reach a higher band, you should focus on expanding your range of vocabulary to include more precise academic terms and ensure you are using words in the correct context. Proofreading for common spelling errors is also essential.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, which hinders readability. For instance, 'they get out their home they meet the new children' lacks proper punctuation and conjunctions. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb—before attempting more complex forms. Consistent practice with punctuation and verb tenses will also help reduce the number of errors.

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