Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays,many parents decide to shift thier children to preschool when theyb are very small like three or four years old.however other parents believe that it is a better wait untill primary school.In this eassy i will disscus both the advantages and drowbacks of shifting children to pre scvhool early.
To begin with,there are some benefits when children go to preschool early.The main benefit is that children can learn how to talk with other children and make new friends.This very for their soical skills.To elaborate,because they are not alone at home with parents.another reason is that they can start learning basic things like numbers,letters,colours.for instance,my small brother went to the preschool at three years old and he learned how to count zero ten rapidly.this assist them for prepare their parimary school.
On the other hand,there are also some disadvantages to this choice.fristly the young children at the three or four years old need love and care from their mother and fathers.if they go to school early,they might feel bad and cry because they miss their family.secondly,preschool can be very expensive for needy peolpe.finaly,childrten caN BECAME SICK BECAUSE THEY STAY WITH MANY OTHER CHILDREN IN ONE ROOM,SO DISEASES PREAD FAST.
IN CONCLUSION ,SENDING CHILDREN TO PRESCHOOL AT A YOUNG AGE HAS BOTH GOOD POINTS AND WORST POINTS.IT ASSIST THEM MAKE A FRIENDS AND LEARN EARLY ,BUT IT ALSO COST ALOTV OF MONEY AND MAKE THEM MISS THIER FAMILY.I THINK PRAENTS SHOULD CHOISE WHAT IS THE BETTER FOR THIER OWN CHILDERN AND WAHT BENEFITS THEY WILL GET FROM THE PRESCHOOL.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The candidate addresses all parts of the task by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of sending young children to preschool. A position is presented, although it is somewhat simplistic and repetitive in the conclusion. Ideas are supported with relevant explanations and examples, such as the mention of a sibling learning to count and socialising with peers. However, some arguments remain slightly under-developed and lack extended elaboration. For instance, the points regarding cost and illness are stated briefly without much expansion. Nevertheless, the prompt is adequately answered, fitting comfortably within the Band 5.5 to 6.0 range. Because the ideas are relevant and cover all parts of the prompt, a score of 6.0 is appropriate.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organized into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, two body paragraphs covering advantages and disadvantages, and a conclusion. However, cohesion at the sentence level is frequently faulty and mechanical. There are numerous missing spaces after punctuation marks, inconsistent capitalization, and awkward transitions. Cohesive devices are minimal or simplistic, relying on basic connectors like 'To begin with', 'On the other hand', and 'IN CONCLUSION'. Paragraphing is present and separates the main ideas appropriately, but the lack of accurate punctuation and referencing affects the overall flow. The response demonstrates a coherent overall arrangement but is hindered by mechanical cohesion issues, warranting a band score of 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The lexical resource is limited and basic, featuring frequent spelling errors ('thier', 'untill', 'eassy', 'disscus', 'drowbacks', 'soical', 'parimary', 'fristly', 'finaly', 'caN', 'BECAME', 'SPREAD', 'ALOTV', 'PRAENTS', 'CHOISE', 'WAHT', 'CHILDERN') and word-formation issues ('pre scvhool'). The vocabulary used is repetitive and simple ('small', 'children', 'learn', 'good points', 'bad'). While the vocabulary is adequate to convey basic ideas about preschool, the high frequency of spelling mistakes and lack of sophisticated phrasing restrict the score. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'rapidly' and 'diseases spread fast', but errors in spelling and collocation place this firmly at a Band 5.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as conditional structures ('if they go to school early, they might feel bad') and subordinate clauses. However, grammatical accuracy is weak throughout the text. There are frequent errors in article usage, punctuation, capitalization, and verb forms (e.g., 'this assist them for prepare', 'help them make a friends', 'cost alotv of money'). Punctuation errors are particularly pervasive, with missing spaces after commas and periods. Although meaning is generally clear despite the errors, the high frequency of basic grammatical slips prevents the score from reaching Band 6.0. A band score of 5.0 reflects frequent errors that cause some difficulty for the reader.
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