Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some parents send their child to school at early age and some are in the elemntary school.some parents choose to send them child at nusery school but some are not, the advantage of child that go to school early was they develop the good attitude that the teachers teach, they learn different aspect of converstions and develop learning at early age.most of the child in early age go to school was bright and has a good attitude, they trained advance and also the child was prepared to go in primary shools. Unlike child was straight to primary school they did not prepared and their mind is going to play and almost they rush the class to finish to go home early and most at the time they cried when their parents were starting to leave them alone at the school.their mind are not will prepared to study because childs focus was at home,something like they missed watching tv,use cellphone or anything gudgets something like that they did not learn early to communicate other child,they shy,no confidence.for example my best friends daughter name anna, anna was go to nursery school she build self confidence at the early age and shes not a shy girl because she expose in the school activity at her young age so thats the advantage of going to nursery school early. In my opinion the childs in the preschool have an advantage beacause they trained them in advance and have a positive attitude unlike in going straight to primary school,childs are not totaly prepared and need more weeks to recover.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Tinutugunan ng sagot ang paksa sa pamamagitan ng pagtalakay sa mga pakinabang at di-pakinabang ng pagpapaaral sa mga bata sa preschool sa murang edad. Gayunman, limitado at hindi lubos na napalawak ang mga ideya, kaya nananatili sa antas na ito ang sagot. Halimbawa, binanggit ng sumulat na nakatutulong ang maagang pag-aaral para “develop the good attitude” at “learn different aspect of converstions,” pero inilista lamang ang mga puntong ito at hindi sinuportahan ng malinaw na paliwanag o matibay na halimbawa. Napakaikli at batay lamang sa personal na karanasan ang halimbawang “my best friends daughter name anna.” Bagama’t malinaw na ipinahayag ang paninindigan sa konklusyon (“In my opinion the childs in the preschool have an advantage”), kulang sa lalim ang kabuuang pagtalakay at hindi lubusang nasusuri ang mga komplikasyon sa magkabilang panig ng argumento.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

May batayang pagkakaayos ang teksto: mula sa panimula, patungo sa mga argumento, at nagtatapos sa konklusyon. Sinubukan ding paghiwa-hiwalayin ang mga talata, bagama’t hindi pare-pareho ang pagitan ng mga ito sa buong sagot. Gayunman, walang malinaw na pangkalahatang daloy ng mga ideya, at madalas maputol ang daloy dahil sa kulang at paulit-ulit na paggamit ng mga pang-ugnay. Madalas magsanib ang mga pangungusap nang walang angkop na mga salitang pantransisyon o bantas; labis na umaasa ang sumulat sa comma splice at sa mga paulit-ulit na pariralang gaya ng “some parents” o “childs” para pag-ugnayin ang mga ideya. Paminsan-minsan ay malabo rin ang pagtukoy sa mga paksa, gaya ng biglang paglipat mula sa pangkalahatang pahayag tungkol sa mga bata tungo sa partikular na halimbawa ni Anna nang walang maayos na panandang pantransisyon. Dahil dito, nagmumukhang mekanikal at putul-putol ang kabuuang pagkakabuo ng teksto.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Limitado ang bokabularyong ginamit at sapat lamang ito para sa gawain; may kapansin-pansing mga pagkakamali na paminsan-minsang nagpapahirap sa mambabasa. Sinubukan ng sumulat gumamit ng ilang salitang may kaugnayan sa paksa, gaya ng “nursery school,” “primary schools,” at “self confidence,” pero mas marami ang paulit-ulit na pagkakamali sa pagpili, anyo, at baybay ng mga salita. Kabilang sa mga halimbawa ang “elemntary school,” “converstions,” “gudgets,” at “beacause.” Paulit-ulit ding ginamit sa buong sanaysay ang mga payak na salita gaya ng “child” at “early age.” Bagama’t karaniwang nauunawaan ang ibig sabihin, nililimitahan ng madalas na pagkakamali sa baybay at pagbuo ng salita ang lawak ng bokabularyo at hinahadlangan nitong umabot sa mas mataas na antas ang sagot.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Limitado ang iba’t ibang estrukturang gramatikal na ginagamit; karamihan ay mga payak na pangungusap, kasabay ng mga pagtatangkang gumamit ng masalimuot na sugnay na hindi maayos ang pagkakabuo. Madalas magkamali sa anyo ng pandiwa, pangmaramihan, pantukoy, at paghahati ng mga pangungusap, kaya nahihirapan ang mambabasa. Kabilang sa mga kapansin-pansing problema ang hindi pagtutugma ng simuno at pandiwa, gaya ng “the childs in the preschool” at “childs focus,” kawalan ng mga pantukoy (“go to school”, “at early age”), at mga alanganing estruktura gaya ng “the advantage of child that go to school early was they develop...” Problematiko rin ang bantas; may mga pangungusap na tuluy-tuloy at walang wastong paghinto, pati mga comma splice, gaya ng “they trained advance and also the child was prepared to go in primary shools.” Para umunlad, kailangang mas mahusay na makagamit ng masalimuot na estruktura ng pangungusap at mabawasan ang mga pagkakamali.

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