Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Hello... Puja!.. How are You? I m really happy For Your merrieage with your Chilhood Crush I hope And i pray For happy family . i want to Discuss some important topic with u is a about baby's schooling at young age . so according to you what you preffer for your baby's schooling . like preschool or primary school becuase some parent are preffer prescholl at like baby's age is just 3 to 4 years old it's their childhood time .this time is for baby's Enjoy their childhood friend like playing with their friend families and if some parent are bringinf their chind to preschool they will risk their childhood also because its very young age to School as just 3 to 4 years old baby .

I don't know why some parent are send their chidren to preschool. i did't have any idea what's their expectation about their 3 to4 years child. because obiviously it's baby chilhood time is give some time with family member playning also like going somewhere , also giving all brief idea about caltural activity like how and why we celebrate festival .

if you send baby prescool at very young age so u have to face some disadvantages and like you compromise with your baby mindset beacuse baby mindset is totally changed if your baby is very serious mode in their life . also some parent about thinking about their child school at perfect age like Primary school according is best age of schooling.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response is only minimally focused on the question. It mentions preschool at ages three to four and gives a few possible disadvantages, such as reduced time for play and family activities, but it does not adequately discuss the advantages requested by the task. The ideas about cultural activities and a child’s “mindset” are difficult to connect clearly to the benefits or drawbacks of preschool, and there are no specific examples to support the points. The opening is framed as a personal message to Puja rather than an essay, which also weakens the response to the task. To improve, present both advantages and disadvantages directly, explain each with a clear reason, and support them with a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into paragraphs, and the ideas generally remain related to early schooling. However, the progression is difficult to follow: the first paragraph begins with a personal greeting, then shifts to the essay topic, while the later paragraphs repeat concerns about childhood without developing a clear sequence of points. Linking phrases such as “because” and “also” are used, but connections between claims are often unclear, and references such as “this time” and “their” do not always make the meaning precise. A clearer structure would separate the advantages from the disadvantages, with one main idea explained in each paragraph and a focused conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “preschool,” “primary school,” “childhood,” “family,” and “cultural activity.” However, the range is repetitive, and several word choices or spellings make the message difficult to understand, such as “merrieage,” “preffer,” “brief idea,” and “serious mode.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “compromise with your baby mindset” and “baby schooling.” These issues fit a limited, basic vocabulary range and at times strain the reader’s understanding. Build a more accurate set of topic phrases, such as “early childhood education,” “social development,” and “structured learning,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writing shows attempts to form longer sentences using “because,” “if,” and “also,” but sentence structures are mostly uncontrolled, and errors frequently obscure relationships between ideas. For example, “some parent are send their chidren” has problems with subject–verb agreement and verb form, while “if some parent are bringinf their chind to preschool they will risk their childhood” has an unclear grammatical construction. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and missing apostrophes or full stops. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using one clear subordinate clause. Pay particular attention to subject–verb agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence punctuation.

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