Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Many parents send their toddlers for kindergardens meanwhile few parents takes time to become old enough for sending them school

i belive most of the kids around three to four really have fun playing with other age group however they will be activitly participate finding new things

this could help parents to work and be peace

children around three to four being in preschool will help them to be socially active with their skills however that would definitely work while the grew up

when i used to be a kid my parents put me in the kindergarden where my parent had there duty hours and i being safe under a gaurdain and learning new things with the mentor while fun around kids

overall that benefits kids to explore things and having their time witrh other howevr good communication skill will improved

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You address the topic by identifying possible benefits of preschool, including social interaction, learning new things, and allowing parents to work. Your personal example about attending kindergarten also supports this side of the discussion. However, the task asks for both advantages and disadvantages, and the response gives almost no disadvantage; it also does not establish a clear, balanced position. The ideas are brief and often asserted rather than explained—for example, the claim that preschool helps children become socially active is not developed with a specific explanation or example. The response is also 109 words below the required minimum, which leaves too little space to cover the task adequately. Develop both sides and explain each point with relevant detail.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening statement is followed by benefits, a personal example, and a concluding sentence. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, the progression between ideas is not consistently clear, and the paragraphs do not develop distinct points. For instance, the opening contrasts parents who choose preschool with those who wait, but the response does not return to or explain that contrast. Linking words such as “however” appear without a clear opposing idea, and the final sentence repeats earlier benefits rather than drawing the discussion together. Use separate paragraphs for advantages and disadvantages, and connect each point explicitly to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “preschool,” “socially active,” “communication skill,” and “mentor.” These choices show an attempt to discuss children’s development and care, rather than relying entirely on very general language. However, the range is limited, and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “kindergardens,” “activitly,” “gaurdain,” and “witrh.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “be peace” and “other age group.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms for benefits and drawbacks would also help you explain the topic more fully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, and the personal example shows an effort to describe a past experience. However, the range of sentence structures is very limited, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur frequently. For example, “few parents takes” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, while “children around three to four being in preschool will help them” is not formed as a complete, clear clause. The sentence beginning “when i used to be a kid” also runs several ideas together without clear grammatical links. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using clauses such as “because” and “although.” Check tense and agreement in every sentence.

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