Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

To begin with, studies play a precious role in every indivuals life. in current time many parents do suffer in putting their children in preschool at early age or to put after a certain age for studies. there are some advantages and disadvantages as well.

To conclude, many parents do think that putting there child in school at early age will create many issues for certain time. more overly it will create fomo for the child to go at the school at very small age the child will feel alone and stays little sad alloverly after also coming back to home. many of parents observed that putting the child at very early age to the schools make them health really because of staying along away from parents suddenly. after many of the cases Niageria country has implemented rule of not putting there child at early age

furthermore, now I will disscuss about benefits of putting a child at early age; child will become brillient at very small age, child will became independent day by day and even capture more things in day to day life from a normal child. after a certain years when preschools complete and then primary schools start that time anyone can observe difference between a studies student and not studied student. 'India' has strictly introduced a law for only one state Gujarat to putt there child at preschools and as an result there are mostly Gujarati buisness man nationally as well as internationally

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify both sides of the question: possible emotional and health difficulties for young children, and benefits such as independence and learning. However, the discussion is only partially developed. The disadvantages are asserted rather than explained, and the claim about Nigeria is unclear and unsupported; the Gujarat example also does not clearly show how preschool attendance leads to business success. The opening mentions the issue but does not establish a clear position or outline the discussion, and “To conclude” appears before the advantages paragraph, so there is no effective conclusion. The response is also three words below the required minimum. Develop each point with a clear explanation or relevant example, and finish with a brief summary of your view.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to separate the discussion into paragraphs and signal ideas with phrases such as “To begin with” and “furthermore.” The reader can identify a disadvantages section and an advantages section. However, the order is confusing: “To conclude” introduces the disadvantages, while the advantages follow afterward, and the essay ends without a conclusion. Connections between claims are often missing, so the examples about Nigeria and Gujarat do not clearly support the points around them. Some sentences run together, particularly in the paragraph beginning “more overly,” which makes the progression difficult to follow. Use a clear sequence—introduction, disadvantages, advantages, conclusion—and connect each example explicitly to its main idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “independent,” “preschools,” and “primary schools,” and you attempt to express ideas about children’s development. However, the range is basic and several inaccurate or informal choices make meaning unclear, such as “create fomo,” “capture more things,” and “health really.” Spelling errors, including “indivuals,” “brillient,” “disscuss,” and “buisness,” also reduce accuracy. Some phrases are repetitive, especially “at early age” and “child.” Aim for precise, natural expressions suited to an essay, and check spelling carefully. For example, describe children as “becoming more independent” or “acquiring skills,” rather than using unclear phrases such as “capture more things.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, but control of sentence structure is inconsistent, and errors frequently make the ideas harder to understand. For example, “many parents do suffer in putting their children in preschool” has an awkward grammatical pattern, while “the child will feel alone and stays little sad” shifts verb form and has unclear structure. There are also problems with articles, possessives, agreement, and punctuation, as in “putting there child” and “many of parents observed.” Several sentences are joined without clear punctuation. Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses using forms such as “because” and “although.” Proofread for consistent tense, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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