Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, Children are the most considerable youth of any country. Many parents put their children in playschool when they are smaller than primary school However, other group of parents wait until their child is old enough for school before they can leave their child in a school. I personally believe that child can learn many things in a playschool with other student of their age. Now i discussing the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.

Firest of all advantages of sending children to playschool that they are growing faster than other student who live at home because child learn new things like group activities like they can eat food with each other and they can read books with each other. Also, children are taking care by playschool staff because it is main concern in today's life because their both parents are working and they are not taking care of their children so they can put their child in the preschool where they can taking care of child. Moreover, children are away from mobile phone so their health are good as compare to other children. For Example, My nephew went to playschool at the age of 2 , So my brother drop her at 10 and they are faster grown up child than my family other children.

However now taking about disadvantages , Many parents are taking granted towards their child because of playschool. they think that my child are taking care by staff of playschool. In addtion to this, Many children are shy and calm so they wants to play their own things and they wants to do more personalized things so preschool idea is not good for them. For example, many parents are not afford preschool fees so they wants their child are playing their own things and they play outside things with other age of people so they can comfortable with other easily.

To sum up, there is a more advantage of putting children to playschool at young age than disadvantage. There is growing benefits and taking care of child by staff of school and also there is a more benefits for their parents because they have not more time in today's busy schedule.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the question and give a clear overall preference for preschool, supported by reasons such as group activities, childcare while parents work, and reduced mobile-phone use. The nephew example also makes the response more personal. However, the discussion is only partly developed: the claim that children “are growing faster” is unclear, and the disadvantages are less convincingly explained. The point about shy children needing individual activities is relevant, but the example about families unable to afford fees shifts toward affordability rather than explaining the effects of starting preschool young. To strengthen the response, explain each advantage and disadvantage more precisely and make sure examples directly support the point being discussed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, a paragraph for advantages, a paragraph for disadvantages, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “First of all,” “However,” and “To sum up” help readers follow the broad direction. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and some links are mechanical or unclear. For instance, the advantages paragraph moves from social learning to staff care and then mobile-phone use without explaining how these points connect. References such as “they” and “their” are sometimes difficult to follow, especially in the nephew example. Use clearer topic sentences, group related ideas, and make pronoun references explicit so the argument develops more smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “playschool,” “group activities,” “preschool fees,” and “busy schedule.” There are also attempts at less common phrasing, such as “personalized things,” though this is not a natural fit for the intended meaning. Repetition of “children,” “child,” “playschool,” and “benefits” limits the range, while inaccurate collocations and word forms sometimes make ideas harder to understand: “taking granted towards their child” and “faster grown up child” are examples. Spelling errors such as “Firest” and “addtion” are also noticeable. Build a more precise set of expressions for social development, supervision, and independence, and check collocations and spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “so,” and “who,” which shows some effort to vary sentence structure. However, the range remains limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make several sentences difficult to interpret. Examples include “Now i discussing,” “other group of parents,” and “they can taking care of child,” where verb forms, articles, or agreement are not controlled. In “My nephew went to playschool … they are faster grown up,” the tense and sentence construction are also unclear. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, including lowercase “i” and missing sentence boundaries. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns before adding more complex clauses.

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