Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some parents send their children to preschool when they are three or four years old. Other parents wait until their children are old enough for primary school before they send them to school.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of sending children to preschool at a young age.
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Education is a powerful weapon,you use it then you can change the world.Education is very important for everyone and every fields like technology,sciene and humunties.Many people learn time to time because nowadays education is very neccessary for everyone.Some parents want their children go to preschool when they are four years old.Other parents want their children are go to primary school then they are young.

To begin with,education is very important for children.firstly the preschool is very important for children because the school learn to child new things. Children learn more things like they hold a pencil in hand,speak little words like a for apple and many poem.Education is help to children about creative thinking.Children learn a young age it is very good.Secondly,they learn easily in preschool.Teachers teach to children very politely and peacfully.They help the children with picture.when the children go to school in four years old then they are finish university study to time.After that then can doing a good job.

On the other hand,some people think that the preschool is not important for four years old children.first of fall the children are not understand properly in this age.Children not learn easliy in preschool.They can not carry school bags.Secondly when children going to school then some medical issu faceing them. beacause children are very small. Thirdly many parents paid high fees in preschool and needy people do not give te fees to preschool.

in conclusion,education is very neccessary in the world.some people think that is good platform for children.other people not want to go child in young age.I believe preschool is a good for children.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides of the question and give a clear preference in the conclusion: “I believe preschool is a good for children.” The advantages are relevant, including learning basic skills, creative thinking and receiving help from teachers; the disadvantages include children being very young and the cost to parents. However, these points are mostly listed rather than explained. For example, the claim that preschool helps children finish university and get a good job is not supported by a clear link or example, while the concerns about understanding lessons and carrying bags need more explanation. The opening also spends space on education generally instead of directly framing the preschool debate. Develop fewer points with reasons or examples, and make your position clearer throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph on advantages, a paragraph on disadvantages and a conclusion. “To begin with” and “On the other hand” help signal the shift between the two sides, and the reader can generally follow the main ideas. However, progression within paragraphs is often list-like, with “firstly,” “secondly” and “thirdly” introducing points that are not fully connected or explained. Some links are unclear, such as “when the children go to school in four years old then they are finish university study to time.” The conclusion repeats the general contrast rather than drawing the discussion together. Use clearer links between each claim and its explanation, and ensure each paragraph develops a central idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a basic range of topic vocabulary, including “preschool,” “primary school,” “creative thinking,” “teachers” and “fees,” so the subject is usually identifiable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several word choices or forms make meaning difficult to follow, such as “the school learn to child new things,” “medical issu faceing them” and “needy people do not give te fees.” There are also frequent spelling errors, including “sciene,” “humunties,” “neccessary” and “easliy.” These issues limit precision and sometimes strain the reader. Build accuracy with common education-related collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully; for example, describe what children “learn at preschool” and say that families “cannot afford the fees.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the response includes some basic subordination, as in “because children are very small.” However, the range is limited, and frequent errors in sentence structure and verb forms make several sentences difficult to understand. Examples include “Some parents want their children go to preschool,” “Other parents want their children are go to primary school,” and “when the children go to school in four years old then they are finish university study to time.” Articles, agreement and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “the preschool is very important” and the run-on opening “Education is a powerful weapon,you use it then you can change the world.” Practise accurate subject–verb patterns and simple complex sentences before adding more detail.

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