Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

1.Introduction

2.Health problems

3.Increase in prices

4.Conclusion

Many manufactured food and drink products also contain a high level of sugar which also affect our health which causes many health problems. I am strongly agree with this vision and we should try to consume less than the normal use because our abnormal use of sugar then the sugary products prices also increases.

Moreover, sugar is not for our health and it spread many diseases. The main problem of sugar is it causes obesity nowdays, it very common among people. Sugar also affects our bones and make our bones weak. It is even not good for the children and it may the teeths of children. For example, if we take sugar than the normal then it may causes a severe disease called diabetes.

In addition to this, the rate of sugar also incrases day by day and encourge people to cosume less sugar. It is very good idea because if government do this then the people eat healthy foods, fruits, and juices which are good for human health. Government also put extra charges on sugar and it give other facilities for health.

At the end, we should try to less consumption of suagr because it is not good for human health and it causes many diseases. In my opinion, it is a very good idea because when government increase the prices of suagr then people avoid to buy and use suagr.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a clear position in favour of making sugary products more expensive, and you give relevant reasons, including obesity, diabetes and possible benefits from choosing healthier foods. However, the argument is only partly developed: the health effects are listed rather than explained, and the claim that higher prices will lead people to choose fruit and juice needs support or an example. The relationship between excessive sugar consumption and the proposed price increase is also unclear in the introduction. The response is 11 words below the required minimum, so it does not fully meet the task’s length requirement. Develop each main reason with a clear explanation or specific example, and make the link between price and reduced consumption explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The body paragraphs broadly separate health concerns from the proposed price policy, and transitions such as “Moreover” and “In addition to this” help signal movement between points. However, the numbered outline at the start is unnecessary, and the progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear. For example, the sentence about government charges and “other facilities for health” is not connected clearly to the preceding point. Repeated references to sugar and health also make the argument feel circular. Use topic sentences to establish each paragraph’s main claim, then connect each supporting detail directly to it; clarify pronouns such as “it” where their reference is uncertain.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “obesity,” “diabetes,” “consumption,” and “extra charges.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling problems make the writing less precise. Phrases such as “I am strongly agree with this vision,” “the rate of sugar,” and “the teeths of children” are not natural or clear in this context. There are also repeated basic terms such as “good,” “health” and “sugar,” while misspellings including “nowdays,” “incrases” and “suagr” reduce accuracy. Build a wider set of precise expressions for health effects and pricing, and check spelling and common word partnerships before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional structure in “if government do this then the people eat healthy foods.” However, control is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. The opening sentence repeats “which” and has faulty agreement in “products … affect our health which causes”; “I am strongly agree” also has an incorrect verb pattern. Other examples include “it causes obesity,” followed by “it very common,” and “it may the teeths,” where the sentence structure is incomplete. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, verb forms and complete clauses. Aim first for clear, correct sentences, then add complex structures such as conditionals with accurate verb forms and punctuation.

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