Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

These days a lot of food and drink products consist large amounts of sugar, which can often result into health issues. Therefore, sugary products should have a tax to encourage individuals to consume less sugar. Sugary products can be good in supplying energy in the human body, but they may cause certain diseases when intake too much. I believe implementing a tax on sugary products may discourage people in buying them.

Sugary products such as chocolates and Coca-Cola can cause long-term health problems if they are intake excessively. This is because a human body cannot burn excessive calories from sugary products if a person is in a sedentary lifestyle, which causes some diseases that cannot be treated. For example, a person has been drinking sugary sodas on a daily basis making it as their alternative to water. As a result, the individual may get overweight which can be a hindrance in work and they might possibly get diabetes.

Nevertheless, I believe that to reduce the risk of consuming large amounts of sugar, governments should implement a tax over them. That is because the public might concerned when looking at expensive prices, which causes them to find an alternative product that has much less sugar. For instance, In United Kingdom authorities made Coca-Cola expensive to lessen obesity. Therefore, I believe that British people may buy an alternative soda such as Coke-Zero.

In conclusion, sugary products can cause severe health problems due to the inability of the human body in burning them when a person is in a physical inactivity. However, I argue that by implementing a tax on high sugar foods and drinks, individuals might be encouraged to buy another product that contains less sugar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear: you support taxing high-sugar products to reduce consumption, and you address both the health risks and the proposed measure. The examples of sugary drinks, weight gain and diabetes are relevant, as is the suggestion that consumers might switch to a lower-sugar alternative. However, some points are less fully developed than others. The explanation that excess calories are difficult to burn for people with sedentary lifestyles is broad, and the claim that resulting diseases “cannot be treated” is too absolute and is not supported. The UK example would be more convincing if you explained how the tax affected prices or purchasing behaviour. More precise, developed support would strengthen the argument.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall structure: an introduction states your view, the body paragraphs move from health consequences to taxation, and the conclusion restates your position. Linking expressions such as “Therefore,” “Nevertheless,” and “For instance” help signal the relationships between ideas. At times, however, the progression is somewhat mechanical, and some connections are not fully clear. For example, the shift from the health effects of sugar to the claim that a tax will prompt consumers to choose alternatives could be explained more explicitly. The example about Coke-Zero also needs a clearer link to the claim that the tax reduces sugar consumption. Use referencing and transitions to show how each example supports the paragraph’s main point, rather than relying mainly on signposting words.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, including “long-term health problems,” “sedentary lifestyle,” “implement a tax,” and “alternative product.” These choices make your main ideas understandable, and you attempt some topic-specific language. However, several word combinations or choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “consist large amounts of sugar,” “intake excessively,” “tax over them,” and “a hindrance in work.” Repetition of “sugary products” and “sugar” also limits flexibility. Aim to learn common collocations and use more precise terms, for example, “contain high levels of sugar,” “consume them excessively,” and “impose a tax on these products.” This would make your argument sound more natural and exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses with “which,” “if,” and “because,” and the overall meaning is generally clear. Some sentences are controlled, such as “This is because a human body cannot burn excessive calories…” However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction remain. For example, “when intake too much” needs a subject and a correctly formed verb phrase, while “the public might concerned” is missing “be.” In “a person has been drinking… making it as their alternative,” the participle construction and pronoun reference are not well controlled. There are also awkward constructions such as “the inability of the human body in burning them.” Review clause structure and verb patterns, then proofread for missing verbs and articles.

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