Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Sugar is a household need and almost using in every house all over the world. Nowadays, many products contain high level sugar which causes negative effect to health. We should be create highly priced products to diverse people for using less sugar. I have a mixed opinion on it and I wil explain it briefly below.

First of all, sugar is a basic need for every household items. But it has many cons on health of people espicially for adults. Furthermore, it is a basic need. Many people use sugar according to their need. They now about negative effects of unlimited use of sugar. For instance, my grand father has sugar level problems. So, they prefer not to eat sweat items.

Additionally, many do not aware about serious health issues of sugar use. There are several ways to stop its unlimited use among people. Firstly, we can made these sugary items costly to diverse people to use these products. By doing this, we can revert many people. Secondly, we can spread awareness about health problems for using high level sugar products. So, people will become aware of this then they started to use less sweat items. Moreover, government should need to restrict factories for making these type of item who have rich in sugar. This step will stop many factories for manufacturing. This will help a lot.

To conclude with my own perspective, people should need to scan products before purchasing it. They also need to check ingredients and sugar level of that item written on the wraper.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the general issue and offer relevant measures, including higher prices, public awareness and restrictions on manufacturers. However, the response only partially answers whether you agree or disagree: “I have a mixed opinion” is not clarified, and the conclusion shifts to checking product labels rather than restating your view on price increases. Several points are asserted rather than explained. For example, the grandfather’s sugar-level problem is relevant, but the link between this example and making sugary products more expensive is not developed. To strengthen the response, state a clear position and support each main reason with a specific explanation or example showing how the proposed price change would reduce consumption.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, and signposts such as “First of all,” “Additionally,” and “To conclude” help identify stages of the discussion. However, progression between ideas is not always clear, and some points are repeated: sugar is described as a “basic need” twice in the first body paragraph, while the relationship between that claim and the health risks remains unclear. The second body paragraph also moves quickly from pricing to awareness and then government restrictions, without explaining how these ideas connect or which is most important. Some references, such as “they” in the grandfather example, are unclear. Group related ideas, use clearer references, and build each paragraph around one main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “health problems,” “awareness,” “restrict,” and “manufacturing,” so the main message is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning difficult to follow. For example, “diverse people” does not express the intended idea of discouraging consumers, and “sweat items” appears where “sweet items” is meant. There are also spelling errors such as “espicially,” “wil,” and “wraper.” Aim for precise topic language and check spelling carefully. Replacing repeated general phrases with accurate expressions such as “sugary products” and “reduce consumption” would make the argument clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the overall meaning can usually be followed. However, the range of structures is limited, and errors occur frequently in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction. Examples include “We should be create,” “many do not aware,” and “government should need to restrict”; these should use correctly formed verbs, such as “should create,” “are not aware,” and “the government should restrict.” In “many products contain high level sugar,” the noun phrase also needs more accurate grammatical form. Practise building accurate sentences with modal verbs and subordinate clauses, then check each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb. This will reduce the effort required to understand your points.

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