Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In recent years many manufacture contain high levels of sugar in their product like food and drinks which may causes many health diseases. I agree with the view of sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to intake less sugar.

Firstly, the cold drink contain acidic soda and high amout of sugar quantity which affect to your health problems, similarly consuming more sugar can have higher risk of diabetics. Especially older age and younger age should avoid consuming sugary food and cold drinks. For example, if people consume high amount of sugar in there daily life routine it may affect to insulin resistance and then it cause diabeties in your body.

Furthermore, the sugary product should be make more expensive so people avoid taking drinks and sugar products, I also suggest that manufacture should add less sweet in their food products. If we increases the rates of sugar people use less quantity of sugar in every food items. for instance, if we make awarness about sugar items and which is danger to our body people strting controlling themselves for consume sugar.

In conclusion,I agree with the statement and we should not use more sweet in our food which also affect to our skin and we may get acne prone. Instead of sugar we can add jaggery which is less harmful than sugar. I also prefer people should consume natural sweet like fruits and follow their diet properly and maintain good health by eating sugarless food in home and street food.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear from the introduction and conclusion: you agree that sugary products should cost more. You give relevant reasons, including diabetes risk, and suggest reducing sweetness in manufactured foods. However, the explanation is brief and some points are not fully connected to the question of whether higher prices would reduce consumption; for example, the claim about acne and the suggestion to use jaggery or fruit are introduced without support. The response also falls 8 words short of the 250-word minimum; the 11 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop the price argument with a specific explanation or example, and ensure the response meets the required length.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “Firstly” and “Furthermore,” and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify your main position and supporting points. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the first body paragraph moves from soda to age groups and then insulin resistance without explaining how these points connect. Linking phrases such as “similarly” and “for instance” do not always introduce a clear relationship, and the conclusion adds several new recommendations rather than drawing together the main argument. Organise each paragraph around one central point, then explain and illustrate it in sequence, using references that make the links between ideas explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “insulin resistance,” “manufacture,” “consume,” and “natural sweet,” so the reader can follow the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, such as “health diseases,” “sugar quantity,” “sugar items,” and “less sweet.” Spelling errors including “diabeties,” “amoun[t],” and “awarness” also reduce precision. These issues sometimes make the intended meaning less clear, particularly in the examples. Build a more accurate set of phrases for discussing health effects, pricing, and consumption, and check spelling and word forms during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional example beginning “if people consume high amount of sugar,” and you use basic connectors to extend ideas. However, the range of structures is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “many manufacture contain,” “which may causes,” “the cold drink contain,” and “if we increases,” where agreement and verb forms are not controlled. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “In conclusion,I agree.” Practise checking each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb, and use a few accurate complex patterns rather than extending sentences before their grammar is secure.

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