Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

People are conscious about health nowadays.Sweetness can be caused of various kind of disease, like obesity, heart problem, diabetes and so on.If high price tags contain in sweets and deserts, purchase will be deduct by citizens. Although sugary laden foods and drinks can be harmful, I disagree that increasing their price is the best way to discourage people to consume it.

Increasing the prices of sugary food can be burden for some ordinary people who don"t have any disease and love to eat it.For instance, some low heart rated people have to take sugar frequently.High rated sweet and beverage can be short listed in their bucket list.Additionaly, who are realted with production, their job will be in bad position.If citizens are not consuming then no production needed.It effect badly in economy as well as social life also.Generals should think about the solution about it not agreed with high price.

Government and public also think about differently about consuming and production of sugary foods and drinks. Advertising company can give a details foods manufactured list in package , so that buyer can understand how much sugar they intact. That can be a good solution for needable person who want to get it. For examples, people should know about labelling and also think about what is their consuming power. It can help them to take decision how much they can cost for their daily sugary items.

To sum up, by adding high price can be harmful effect for general as well as governments also, where we can think about consuming less and also think about our needs of sugar in daily receipe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall disagreement and offer relevant alternatives, especially clearer sugar labelling and helping consumers make informed choices. However, the response only partly develops the task: the reasons against higher prices are not consistently convincing or explained. For example, the claim that some people without disease should be able to buy sweets does not address the health rationale in the prompt, while the point about jobs and production is asserted rather than supported. The reference to people who need sugar is also unclear and could be qualified. To strengthen the response, explain why price increases may be ineffective or unfair, support each reason with a specific example, and make the proposed alternatives more directly answer how sugar consumption could be reduced.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The paragraphs broadly group reasons against price increases and an alternative based on product information. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow, and several points are placed beside one another without showing their relationship. For instance, the discussion moves from people who enjoy sweets to employment and then the economy without explaining the links. Connectors such as “Although,” “For instance,” and “To sum up” provide some signposting, but some transitions are awkward or do not clarify the argument. Improve cohesion by giving each paragraph one central claim, developing it step by step, and using clear references to link examples back to that claim.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “health problems,” “production,” “economy,” and “labelling,” and you use some topic-specific expressions such as “sugary foods and drinks.” However, the range is limited and frequent inaccurate word choices or collocations sometimes make the meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “high heart rated people,” “sugary laden,” “purchase will be deduct,” and “consuming power.” Spelling and word-form errors such as “Additionaly” and “realted” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural phrases rather than translating directly: for example, describe people with low blood sugar as needing sugar, and say that purchases may decrease. Building a small set of accurate expressions for health, pricing and consumer behaviour would make your argument clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including the concession beginning “Although sugary laden foods and drinks can be harmful” and the conditional idea “If citizens are not consuming then no production needed.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence formation, agreement, articles and punctuation can make the reader work to understand your meaning. For example, “If high price tags contain in sweets” lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “It effect badly in economy” has problems with the verb and sentence construction. Several sentences also run together without appropriate spacing or punctuation. Practise forming complete subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses carefully; check articles, verb forms and sentence boundaries during revision.

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