Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Several number of producer of food and drink products consist of high level of sugar,which can causes several haelth issues.sugar products should be make more valueble to encourage people to consume small amount of sugar.

I parcialy agree to this statment becuse there are many other ways to encourage indivituals to consume less amount of sugar as compare to made it more expensive.

Many manufactured companies sugar products are expensive but people still buying that products. If the comapany make it that products expensive those people will not able to buy those who need it. i will sugest that the manufacturer should clearly show the real amount of sugar to indivituals and aware them about the amount of sugar in the product they will know the sugar and they will redeuse the consuming of sugar. In addition,the producer of these products will never show the real amount of sugar to people,people should reserch about the rise level of sugar and point out the health problems.

In the other hand indivituals do not has that amount of time to reserch about the product is a big source of health problem in this aspect manufacture should make the product expensive then some people will reduce the level of sugar products.forthermore,manuficturer should make other products same like that but they should use less amount of sugar it is also a great idea for them,And sell that product on the same price of the high amount of sugar. however that product will be not the cause of health promlems.

In conclusion manuficturer companpanies should aware the people about the product sugar level and its about the cause of that product or make the product more valueble than the consuming amount will be decrease of high level sugar products.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a recognisable, partly qualified position: you “partially agree” and argue that informing consumers and offering lower-sugar alternatives may also reduce consumption. These points are relevant, and you do address the proposed price increase by noting that some people may be unable to afford products. However, the position is not consistently explained: the opening favours other methods, while the later paragraph accepts making products more expensive without clarifying when or why you support it. The ideas about displaying sugar levels and manufacturers’ responsibilities are repeated but not developed with a specific example or a clear explanation of their likely effect. Make your degree of agreement explicit and support each main reason with a fuller explanation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic essay shape, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the paragraphs broadly group related points. Some linking expressions, such as “In addition,” “Furthermore” and “In conclusion,” help signal relationships. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from prices to labelling, then to manufacturers not revealing sugar levels and consumers researching health problems. The contrast introduced by “On the other hand” is also unclear because the paragraph continues with related suggestions rather than a distinct opposing view. Repeated references to “the product” and “people” make connections vague. Organise each paragraph around one main reason, then use clear references and links to show how each supporting sentence develops it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “high level of sugar,” “health problems,” “manufacturer” and “consume,” so the reader can identify the subject and main suggestions. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “product,” “sugar” and “people.” Frequent spelling errors, such as “haelth,” “indivituals” and “manuficturer,” and inaccurate word forms or collocations, including “more valuable” for more expensive and “reduce the consuming,” sometimes make the intended meaning harder to understand. Aim to learn accurate topic phrases and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise expressions for pricing, consumer awareness and reduced-sugar alternatives would help you explain your ideas with greater clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses linked with “because,” “if” and “that,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in verb forms and agreement occur in examples such as “which can causes,” “should be make” and “individuals do not has.” Sentence construction is also faulty in “Many manufactured companies sugar products are expensive,” while missing or misplaced punctuation creates run-on sentences, especially in the paragraph about labelling and consumer research. These problems sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Check subject–verb agreement, verb forms after modal verbs, articles and sentence boundaries when proofreading.

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