Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Today, everything is made by artificial. In food and drink products has manufacture high levels of sugar. It maybe harmful for people and increase the health problems. While other products made be more expensive to insure people to consume less sugar. Now i will discuss with both point of views.

On the one hand, many people have an health issues due to using more sugar. People use the sugar in different categories like in sweet, cake and brownies. Food brands are manufactured high level of sugar in many things.It used more sugar for making the tasty food. Nowadays, due to sugar health problems are increased day by day. People face diet problems and fitness. For example, In Pakistan many companies make unhealthly food and drinks maybe dangerous for people like Pepsi.

On the other hands, some argued that sugary products produced high valuable to encourage people for low sugar. Sugary products are also dangerous for all people. Children are used to many fast foods and drinks. It creates high level of disease-causing. Sugar products are entirely good or bad for the health, it depends on the source which amount consumed. If these are products are made be more expensive it maybe encourage people to less consume. For example, children are who lives in the cities area they are using more sugary produtcs.

As a result, I agree with the statement of health problems, because people are used more sugar than other things. It arise the health issue and other serious disease. People should be used less sugar for the health care.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the topic and state a position in the conclusion: “I agree with the statement of health problems.” You also mention health effects and the idea that higher prices might reduce consumption. However, the response only partially answers the question because your position is not clear throughout: the introduction says you will discuss “both point of views,” and the body does not clearly explain whether you support making sugary products more expensive. Several ideas remain under-developed. For instance, you mention diet and fitness problems but do not explain how a price increase would change people’s choices or provide a specific example of this effect. Make your agreement or disagreement explicit from the introduction and develop two relevant reasons with clear explanations.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

Your response has an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “On the one hand” and “On the other hands,” and a concluding paragraph, so there is some organisation. The main ideas are generally grouped by paragraph, and examples are introduced with “For example.” However, progression is not consistently clear: the first body paragraph focuses on health effects, while the second shifts between children’s habits, disease, whether sugar is good or bad, and price, without a clear sequence. Some linking phrases are inaccurate or repetitive, and references such as “these” in “If these are products” are unclear. Organise each body paragraph around one main reason, then explain and illustrate it; use linking expressions only where they show a precise relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a basic range of topic vocabulary, including “health problems,” “sugar,” “manufactured,” “disease,” and “consume,” which makes the general subject understandable. There are also attempts to use more specific terms, such as “diet problems” and “disease-causing.” However, vocabulary is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or unnatural, sometimes making meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “high valuable,” “unhealthly,” “sugary produtcs,” and “consume less sugar” expressed as “less consume.” Some phrases, such as “food brands are manufactured high level of sugar,” do not communicate the intended meaning clearly. Build a more accurate set of collocations for discussing sugar, health effects, prices, and consumer behaviour, and check spelling and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, including a conditional sentence beginning “If these are products are made be more expensive” and a contrast introduced by “While.” However, sentence structures are limited overall, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur frequently enough to make some ideas difficult to understand. For example, “In food and drink products has manufacture high levels of sugar” lacks a clear subject and correctly formed verb, while “It arise the health issue” has problems with verb form and number. There are also errors in “Children are used to many fast foods” and “people are used more sugar.” Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences first, then add clauses with “because,” “although,” and “if,” checking each clause for a clear subject and verb.

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