Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Various processed food products and beverages contain high level of sugar which leads to many medical issues. The rise in the cost of sweet products would motivate people to consume less sugar.

I agree to this statement and there are several reasons to it. In recent times, heavily processed food are popular among younger generation. Advertisements and campaigns have influenced children to buy such food and beverages which are certainly harmful for their health. Consumption of high levels of sugar will eventually lead to diabetes, cardiovascular and various other life threatning diseases. Shockingly, healthy food such as fruits, nuts and vegetables cost way more than these processed food. For instance, fruits and vegetables which are entirely organic will take a lot of time and effort to grow and then come to the market. But these processed sugary food and drinks are heavily adulterated, hence they are sold for cheap prices. Increasing the prices in such manufactured edibles will not only make it less affordable but also the quality will be increased.

Although, this will be lead to a reasonably lower purchase of sweets, people suffering from poverty and depend on such sales will be affected too. In order for this plan to be successful, there should be a slight decrease in freshly produced food. For example, in the current market vegetables would cost around $20 but sugary products are around $2. Which is a huge difference and this should be the opposite case to encourage people to buy fresh food. However, it is not feasible for organic food to have a such low price. But a reasonable price would not only reduce sweet consumption, but also increase organic food purchase.

In conclusion, this approach of increasing prices of sugary products could possibly bring an improvement but only to a certain degree.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear: you agree that higher prices could reduce sugar consumption, and you also recognise that affordability and poverty complicate this policy. The discussion of health risks and the contrast between inexpensive processed products and costly fresh food are relevant, with the market-price example helping to illustrate the imbalance. This meets the task well, but some points are not fully explained. For example, the claim that raising prices will improve product quality is asserted without showing why this would happen. The suggestion to reduce the price of fresh food is useful, but its feasibility and how it could work alongside a sugar tax need further development. More precise explanation and support would make the argument more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting the main argument and a qualification, and a conclusion. Ideas generally progress from health concerns to pricing and then to possible disadvantages. Linking expressions such as “For instance,” “Although,” and “However” help signal examples and contrast. At times, though, connections are mechanical or unclear. The opening “Although” begins a sentence without a clear main clause, and “this” in “this should be the opposite case” requires the reader to infer exactly which prices should change. The conclusion is relevant but very brief and does not bring together the main reasoning. Clarify references, connect the counterargument more smoothly to your proposal, and use the final paragraph to summarise the position.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “processed food,” “cardiovascular,” “adulterated,” “affordable,” and “organic,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “in order for this plan to be successful.” However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or imprecise: “life threatning diseases” is misspelled and awkward, “heavily adulterated” may not accurately describe all manufactured products, and “freshly produced food” is less natural than a more specific term. Repetition of “sugary products,” “processed food,” and “food and beverages” also limits flexibility. Choose precise terms for the policy and its effects, and check spelling and natural word partnerships to strengthen control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “which,” “although,” and “in order for,” so there is some structural variety. Most ideas remain understandable, but several grammatical errors recur. For example, “high level of sugar” needs a plural or article, “heavily processed food are” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “this will be lead” uses an incorrect verb form. The sentence beginning “Although, this will be lead…” is also incomplete because the concessive clause lacks a main clause; punctuation after “Although” is unnecessary. In “a such low price,” the article pattern is incorrect. Review agreement, verb forms, articles, and clause boundaries, then proofread complex sentences to ensure each one is complete and accurately constructed.

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