Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

A food and drink companies containing high amount of sugar that directly makes harmful to the consumers. The government should be makes rules of high productivity of high sugar fast food and beverage as well as high fines. This will discuss on both views regarding agree and disagree . I am partially agree because people are easily accessible at any location even company provides many door like as deliver to your location, dish as your wish.

On the one hand, Most of people are believing that fast food is better than self cooking even they are caring a lot of fast foods and beverage during the tours,trip,travel . Moreover, Company has a good growth and high profit by their services. also due to health problem showing on people,they are not leaving the items. for example, A companies gives many more discount on their product ,actually this scheme makes people attract and they are using a lot with facing personal diseases which is directly attack to their organsim. Furthermore, some of packet of food there is clearly mentioned about the level of sugar and which ages for suitable to consumed.

On the other hand, Government should be restriction of high consumed product especially using in daily life as a one time dinner. Nowadays, A numerous of patient are admits in the hospital. almost the cases clearing states the using of fast food, expiry food, high level sugar, unhealthy flavors.

for instance, childrens are not properly developed by the holding of healthy food. they need to good and proper guidance about the healthy moreover it is lack of parents.

in conclusion, This is the proper time to guide your children. This is not only about government ruled but individually can also sumit their problems and reduce the use of drinks and foods also be kind when you buy something from the store.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt but struggles with clarity and logical development. While you mention both sides, the position is not clearly maintained throughout the essay. The introduction is confusing, and the arguments regarding government intervention and personal responsibility are under-developed. For example, the point about 'childrens' development' is relevant but lacks a clear connection to the specific proposal of increasing prices on sugary products. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-explained argument that directly answers the prompt's question about whether price hikes are an effective solution.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is often disjointed. Transitions like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' are used, but the internal logic within paragraphs is weak. For instance, the transition from discussing company profits to health problems in the second paragraph is abrupt. Additionally, referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the conclusion where 'sumit their problems' is vague. Improving the use of cohesive devices to link sentences more naturally would significantly enhance the readability and logical progression of your arguments.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate, which hinders the expression of complex ideas. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'makes harmful to the consumers' instead of 'is harmful to consumers' and 'organism' used incorrectly to refer to human health. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to use more sophisticated terms effectively. To reach a higher band, focus on learning collocations (e.g., 'implementing taxes' rather than 'makes rules of high productivity') and ensure you are using words in their correct grammatical context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The government should be makes rules'), article usage (e.g., 'A companies'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper syntax, such as 'A numerous of patient are admits in the hospital.' While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically verb tenses and pluralization, before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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