Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Owing to the problem various food and drink items producer adding more level of sugar into their products, which is causing many health issues. Sugary food products should be more price to make people less use of these products. I agree with the statement this is one way to tackle the problem, but human being also aware about their intake of sugary items.
Increasing price of the products containing more sugar is one way of tackle the issue whereas, In the long run general population has to learn about their health concerns and more aware about the addition of sugar in the food and drink items and selection of the products should be on the basis of sugar added in the consuming products. At the moment, the average people are suffering from various health issue as per study happened in the Oxford university fifty percent of people are facing weight gain issue due to consuming high sugar in the packaged food items. Due to that they are becoming lazy and getting more health issues.
However, targeting higher price of the food products can reduce the consumption of products which are containing high level of sugar. Adding the more natural ways of sugar in the food items which harm less to the mankind and increase the quality of the product reason behind that if more good sugar consumption added to the food it will automatically make producer to increase the amount of products.
In Conclusion, I believe the best way to tackling the problem adding more natural sugar in the food and drinks along with this make people more aware about their health need which can help to reduce this problem.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt but lacks a clear, consistent position. While you agree that price increases are a valid strategy, the argument becomes muddled when you introduce the idea of 'natural sugar' as a better alternative. This shift weakens your focus on the specific proposal in the prompt. Furthermore, the development of ideas is limited; for example, the mention of an Oxford study is vague and lacks a clear connection to how price hikes specifically solve the issue. To improve, ensure your main arguments directly support your thesis throughout the essay and provide more detailed explanations for your claims.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear transitions. For instance, the transition 'However, targeting higher price...' does not effectively contrast with the previous paragraph. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often mechanical or misused, such as 'Due to that they are becoming lazy' or 'reason behind that if more good sugar consumption added'. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow your line of reasoning. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would enhance coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'products', 'sugar', and 'health issues'. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'make people less use of these products' instead of 'discourage consumption' and 'average people' instead of 'the general public'. You attempt to use some academic vocabulary, but it is often applied incorrectly, which hinders precision. To reach a higher band, focus on learning collocations and using more varied, precise vocabulary related to health, economics, and public policy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with sentence structure, such as 'Owing to the problem various food and drink items producer adding more level of sugar', which lacks a main verb and has incorrect word forms. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are also problematic throughout the text. While you attempt some complex sentences, they are often structurally flawed. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and preposition usage.
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