Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some producer produce food and drink products it contains high level of sugar, which cause some health issues. Sugary items should be made more expensive to encourage individuals to take less sugar. I am aggre with this statement and I will elaborate my point of views in the upcoming paragraphs.
To start with, there are many products that contains sugar in there products in very high level. It is not healthy for the life of individuals. The producer produce that products because the customer demand very high. Every person in the world want aftermarket food and drinks. Because they donot have a such time to make food at home because they are go on there job very fast so they want ready to eat products.
Moving further, sugary products do many types of disease like diabetes which are make effect on person body. Sugar free products are very expensive so the customers have not a much money to buy them . So they consume cheap products which contains high level of sugar in there products. I think that the producers make less sugary products for the consumers. Which donot make any effect on the body of consumer. In the present time many people avoid sugary products because they take care of there health they face many types of problems in there body.
In conclusion, aftermarket food and drinks contains high level of sugar and the less sugary products are very expensive so that's why the consumer donot buy them for the consumption.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position in favor of increasing the price of sugary products. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. While you mention health issues like diabetes, the argument lacks depth and fails to fully explore the economic or social implications of the proposed tax. The ideas are somewhat underdeveloped, and the response relies on generalizations rather than providing specific, well-supported examples. To improve, ensure each paragraph introduces a distinct, well-reasoned point that directly supports your thesis, and provide more detailed explanations of how the proposed solution would function in reality.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The transition between ideas is often abrupt, and the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate (e.g., 'Moving further', 'To start with'). Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your argument. For instance, the connection between the high cost of sugar-free products and the conclusion is not clearly linked to the main argument about taxing sugary items. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence builds logically upon the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas. You frequently use basic terms like 'products', 'sugary', and 'make'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'aftermarket food' (which is incorrect in this context) and 'make effect on person body'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including topic-specific collocations related to health, economics, and public policy. Focus on using more precise verbs and adjectives to convey your meaning more effectively rather than relying on simple, repetitive phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Some producer produce', 'products that contains'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple, and attempts at more complex structures often result in errors, such as 'Which donot make any effect on the body of consumer.' Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of plural forms. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles or incorrect verb tenses will help you achieve a higher level of accuracy.
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