Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
I am agree with it many manufacturer manufactured the food and the drink products with very high level of the sugar like candies and the drinks like coca cola and many other drinks they contain high level of the sugars and the chemicals that create serious health issues now a days.These products are not being sold on the high prices they are also being sold at the same prices with the protein diets so people think the protein diet as the boring one than that of the sugar products, it all depend upon the choices we become what we choose but prices is also a factor that people choose the sugar products easily so if the government will the the prices of these cheap products then it will be very difficult for the people to buy these products and after sometime when the people will not buy these products then the manufacturer will not manufacture these products in the huge amount and after a lot of time these cheap products will be short in the market.The sugar products provides less energy and more fat or more calories people think that there is no problem with these products if they consume on the daily basis they ignore their health therefore they get fat within few months and face serious issues it just not cause our physical health but also it damage our mental health in such a way that people feel lazy when the consume these types of the products and they do not prefer any productive work and like to go to the bed and sleep all the day and the become addicted to the cheap dopamine and the brain fog too. If the prices of the products will be increased then it will be difficult for the people to but these and they will stay safe.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position in favor of increasing taxes on sugary products. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention health issues and the economic impact on manufacturers, the arguments are somewhat repetitive and lack depth. The response would benefit from more specific examples or a more structured exploration of the counter-arguments. The ideas are relevant, but the overall development is basic, and the essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion structure, which impacts the overall task response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is written as a single, long paragraph, which significantly hinders readability and logical progression. There is a lack of paragraphing, which is a requirement for a well-organized response. Cohesive devices are used in a very basic and repetitive manner, such as the frequent use of 'and' to connect clauses. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the flow of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument's development. To improve, you must organize your ideas into distinct paragraphs with clear topic sentences.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'products', 'sugar', and 'cheap' throughout the text. There are some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'protein diets' (which is not clearly defined in this context) and 'cheap dopamine'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is not sufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. You should aim to incorporate more precise terminology related to health, economics, and government policy to enhance the sophistication of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with article usage ('the sugar', 'the prices'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on sentences connected by 'and', lacking proper punctuation. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the errors are frequent enough to occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, using correct punctuation, and ensuring that your verb tenses are consistent throughout the essay.
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